FLASH WILL NEVER DIE WHILE WE'RE ALIVE!
Age 38, Male
Senior Software QA
Second degree IT studies
Kozienice, Poland
Joined on 7/27/08
Do like the title, and good dialog with this one. :) Grammar check/possible improvements...
"Give me one more minute"
"I'm sorry, it was an accident..."
"Can you give that to me?"
"Why are you making it so small?!"
"It isn't my fault you ate so many steroids that you can't fit in anything" or "It isn't my fault that you ate so many steroids you can't fit in anything"
"...and what are you laughing at, skinny?!" or "...and why are you laughing, skinny?!"
OK thanks!
I improved :)
This scene looks pretty good; got nothing technical to add. Maybe just the final sentences can use some touching up:
Keni: "Quite funny you smart nerd" -> "Very funny, smartass."
Keni: "It's because of muscles" -> "It's because of my muscles."
OK, I fixed :P
Thank you all!
Great job, mates!
I am proud of you!
I close this scene! :)
Mejson
Scene 9 - Funny Situation - do you like the title? @MariogD (my brother) claims a weak XD