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Mejson
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Alright, this was a long one, so I'm forgoing the (Original line -> Corrected line) format from before and editing the whole document and pasting. Here it is:

MEJSON:
Nickname:

Mejson (Will live and die with this nickname).

Role in the team:

Leader (Self-proclaimed, though not everyone necessarily thinks so).

Perceived by the others:

He is trustworthy and the team knows that they can rely on him. However, recent events have meant that they are words of the past... Mejson has lost confidence in some heroes’ eyes, and others believe that he is unfit to continue being the leader because of it.

The disadvantages:

He likes to analyze any and all situations and options. He's rigorous (makes strict decisions) and often thinks too much (which can cause a delayed reaction). Very recent events have made him unable to be as focused as before; his mind is clouded/disturbed by terrible feelings and thoughts.

The advantages:

He's brave in the face of danger, has a good track record for decision-making and calm (Thinks first and then does). But that might be changing real soon…

MARIOGD:
Nickname:

MariogD (Nobody is certain why "gD" is in his nickname).

Role in the team:

Archer (Initially clumsy, but eventually he became an excellent hunter who patiently stalks his prey). He learned a lot from Steve (especially hunting and stealth). He claims that he can be one of the leaders, if not the definitive one. This claim is not without reason, as other heroes (who are not egotistical/narcissistic) have noticed.

Perceived by the others:

He's loyal to a fault and the team feels safer with him and his bow at their side, especially when he developed amazing skills in the archery field and an unwavering sense of vigilance to ensure high security. He has really changed and matured into a responsible hero; one to be proud of.

The disadvantages:

He was flippant (Being rather unmotivated with peaceful life), cowardly (Let’s just say CQC isn’t his strongest suit…), but one crisis to another have shown that this is not who he is underneath and other options to fight are available. No longer a prancer (He boasted before), he has taken great strides to rein in the narcissism while maintaining a high self-confidence (Thus avoiding doing anything rash).

The advantages:

He's sympathetic to his fellow survivors which, unlike his arrogance, didn’t need changing. He's especially agile (Can easily dodge opponents) and industrious. When he must, he can always strive to improve himself.

ZIP:
Nickname:

Zip (this nickname reads the 'Źip').

Role in the team:

Medic (Ready, willing, and able to help and heal others at any time). An unfulfilled medical dream... Zip would surely work as a dedicated physician because he possesses unrivaled compassion for the welfare of others. Maybe someday he will fulfill his dream…

Perceived by the others:

He's trustworthy and unhesitatingly help others selflessly, while never expecting anything in return. Everyone sees his value as a member of the team, as there are only a few that share his resolve and dedication (especially those that practice medicine).

The disadvantages:

He's a pacifist, avoiding most violent situations. Whether or not it’s a flaw or a conscious choice, it certainly makes it that much harder to survive in the brutal world of mother nature. Due to his choices he's physically weaker, lacking the conditioning of his compatriots, but does possess some fighting proficiency to hold his own. He is also emotionally impulsive, being too fast to make decisions and takes everything like heay weights on his chests… Nothing is certain in this forest, though, and Zip is slowly but undeniably undergoing an internal transformation...

The advantages:

He's an indispensable member of the team, not only because he's the only healer, but also because of his specific disposition - compassion (every loss is important to him), carries a sturdy mental fortitude and bravely endures all the painful losses, while never being afraid to shed tears...

JIMMY:
Nickname:

Jimmy (Possibly his real given name but nobody knows for certain).

Role in the team:

Support (He was always willing to help out, even if he had no clue what he was doing). He lent himself to virtually any task and was much appreciated for it - A very dedicated hero... But above all a devoted friend... We will dearly miss him…

Perceived by the others:

The team liked him, for being the willing ironman for any occasion. Everyone knew it, some admired him for it, and others thought that it was incredibly foolish. Sadly, the truth is that this quality killed him, not a monster...

The disadvantages:

For Jimmy, the consequences of his own actions didn't matter, and he paid the highest price for it, with his own life... All of our actions have consequences, and Jimmy's constant dedication reduced his chances of survival to virtually zero... An entirely self-inflicted downfall…

(Rest in the next comment; ran out of characters).

I have read it carefully and I believe you have talent :)
OK, the text will be corrected! :P

The advantages:

Few have ever met a more self-sacrificing man who gave his life so that others could live... It sounds like... Well, he was wonderful and selfless, but he certainly wasn't a fool... He knew what would waiting for him and knew the consequences of own actions... He always improved everyone's mood and exhibited the bright side of life - thanks to him everyone learned to believe that everything was possible... We hope he is in a better place...

RÓWNY:
Nickname:

Równy (Nobody remembers why "Równy").

Role in the team:

Warrior (nobody knows who he was before). An average fighter in close combat and from a distance, who did not show his skills because he didn't make it (Unfortunately, it was too late for him) - mother nature asked for him and took him prematurely (No one knows what killed him, but many can hazard an educated guess).

Perceived by the others:

He's an average open companion and Zip is his best friend - they have been taking care of each other for a very long time, however fate had separated them, and when they met again... It was for the last time, because one of them was on Death’s doorstep…

The disadvantages:

He was courageous and willing to do everything for his friend Zip, which is his biggest - and only known - disadvantage. But was it the only one? Unfortunately he didn't live long enough for the others to find out. The sad prose of life...

The advantages:

He's a bit brave - he could prove how much, if only he was given the chance... And steadfast, which is extremely appreciated among comrades, especially in the current situation in which they found themselves.

CANDY:
Nickname:

Candy (Like the food, his nickname means 'sweet' but causes problems for everyone down the line).

Role in the team:

Clown (Always does something dumb), but has recently changed. We could be seeing a transition to Beast-keeper/tamer, starting with the ant he befriended.

Perceived by the others:

He's untrustworthy and unreliable because he behaves irresponsibly and foolishly (Almost everyone consider him handicapped). However, he has shown some signs of intelligence before.

The disadvantages:

He's mentally disabled because he does not live in reality like other people - more like in his own world. Also, he's a pacifist - there isn't a bad bone in his body, having never understood the feelings of anger and fear. For this reason, everything is dangerous for him and should be looked after as if he is a small child. However, Candy’s indifference to the drastic situation might be gone as the gravity of some recent, tragic events have triggered his own development.

The advantages:

He's a great person - he would never hurt another person intentionally. In addition, he loves all animals and wants to care for them. It usually works the other way around, because it's animal favorite, almost all's animals, but... Some exceptions have happened...

MAZUREK:
Nickname:

Mazurek (Just like a favorite cake, but so far nobody knows why).

Role in the team:

Handyman - From the beginning he showed some abilities that distinguished him from his companions, and in the current situation these skills turned out to be quintessential, especially when the needs are huge and the necessary tools and equipment are lacking. Mazurek is able to design and build a lot of interesting objects and inventions that will certainly make life in the wild easier. Under the current circumstances, he's seen as a contemporary Da Vinci, who comes up with new wonderful solutions and weapons for any occasion.

Perceived by the others:

He's trustworthy and the team values his opinion, although he doesn't make any important decisions. He's very gifted and the team treasures his skills which will certainly make better life and survival easier for everyone.

The disadvantages:

He has no significant flaws and is an indispensable member of the team, the only negative thing that can be said about him is that he's not a fighter, but are there many inventors who are? His inventions "fight" for him and they’ve done a great job so far.

The advantages:

He's clever - He has never done anything stupid or unreasonable, maybe because he's always calm (Never give in to emotions) and makes all decisions when he's of a car mind. He's also unrivaled in his craft.

And then for my character! (Maybe it might give you a little clearer idea of what Delsin’s profile could be like…

In the next comment.

I really like the way you write :)
Keep it up! We will of course introduce changes!

DELSIN
Nickname: Delsin (Sounds like a dolphin. Could be, could not be his true given name)

Role in the team: Scout - While a decent skirmisher, Delsin’s lithe frame and incredible stamina lend themselves more towards patrolling and exploring, finding key landmarks, enemies, and objects of interest. He possesses excellent seeing, smelling, and hearing senses to notice things before most others do. This also gives him decent synergy with the hunters of the team, who could use a second mind to investigate a trail.

Perceived by the others: Unlike the rest of the crew, nobody knew Delsin before the situation happened. Thus, while he is liked for his unique skill set and public loyalty, very few have paid him much mind, with the idea that they should keep him at arm’s length as he might be feigning his friendliness. So far, there has no evidence of this. But again, nobody knew him before…

The Disadvantages: Delsin is a pretty average fighter (His punches hardly hurt Steve), and can get overwhelmed if noticed by enemies without backup. But Delsin also has issues getting a full rapport with the rest of the team - aside from Mejson, MariogD and Zip, the crew isn’t certain what to make of him. And most know what happens to the unpredictable one when the cards are wrong…

The Advantages: Delsin has amazingly-sharpened senses and has a natural inclination to observe all of his surroundings. In addition, Delsin is extremely difficult to scare/damage mentally, especially where it counts - the outdoors, which makes him better-suited to gathering intel behind enemy lines and coming back undetected. Finally, he is loyal and dutiful, taking his job very seriously and always being where he must at a moment’s notice.

I have read with great interest and think it fits perfectly! :P
You are amazing! :) :P

We will give exactly this text to Info, because it perfectly reflects the character of Delsin :)
Surely everyone will agree with me that there is nothing to change here :)

Bravo, this is amazing, you have talent, @Animetion24!

Who else left? Jason, Steve God-DL?

There are only 5 left: Jason, Steve, Keni, God-DL, Conrad. :P

Not necessarily in the next Poster - Hero Info Part II. Hmm, the next one will be about MAP (I don't think there will be a lot of changes). :P

Anyone have any concerns about this Poster? @Cyberdevil, you confirm?

Hoooly shit @Animetion24 thorough work! Was just starting to go through this but it seems it may not be necessary. I think I'll just double check the preview later if by chance something's still left there. :)

Regarding the NG player problem, I wonder if you've had this tested by any other people too? Is everyone having the same problem?

Happy to hear medals are getting added this time too! They always add a lot to a game here if you're into competing with that kind of stuff...

And yes, confirmed, it looks good.

Yeeah, great job!

@Cyberdevil, honestly, no, there was no time for it... you can check when you have a moment :P

Medals are a cool idea, you will surely like them!

Ok, approved!

Will do. :)

@Cyberdevil Please do double-check; I have always been pretty afflicted with typos and grammatical mistakes. I even read all of it over again and see one for Mazurek (Never give[s] in to [his] emotions). :)

OK, thanks! I fixed! :P

@Animetion24 @Mejson Thanks Mejson. I've mentioned I take great interest in writing bios so I've had a decent amount of practice before. ;D

@Animetion24, here you are! Ooooo interesting, can you say something more? Which / whose?

@Animetion24 @Mejson @Mejson In the time while waiting for Reduce to return, I developed my writing skills and went to DeviantArt and AO3 to write fanfic of two Japanese media series. In between breaks writing its prose, I would keep interest high by elaborating on some of the new characters introduced for the fiction, which is where I've gotten my feet wet with profiling.

Ooooooo it's very interesting and fun! I'm glad you did something fun. I am sorry that after Reduka 1 I was away for 4 years (I think I felt depressed by the failure of this animation). Do you want to write the descriptions for these 5 heroes? Or I scribble something myself?

And I think that in Reduce 3 (if you want) we will do a separate section in "Extras" for character descriptions, the so-called describe the story of each character (you would be free to write it however you like).

@Animetion24 blindness to our own typos and grammatical errs seems to be a common woe for most writers. :) Will do in a bit!

And that's okay @Cyberdevil?

Aaalright, some fixes/thoughts:

seeing, smelling, and hearing senses - this sounds a bit odd but not wrong per se
better-suited to gathering intel > better-suited for gathering intel
He knew what would waiting for him > He knew what was waiting for him
the consequences of own actions > the consequences of his own actions
everyone learned to believe that everything was possible > might sound better as 'everyone learned to believe that anything was possible'
they met again... It was for the last time > they met again it was for the last time
Zip, which is his biggest > Zip, which was his biggest
especially in the current situation in which they found themselves > especially in the current situation they found themselves in
Almost everyone consider him handicapped > Almost everyone considers him handicapped
shown some signs of intelligence before > shown signs of intelligence before
more like in his own world > more in his own world
for him and should be looked after > for him and he should be looked after
indifference to the drastic situation > indifference to drastic situations
because it's animal favorite, almost all's animals, but... Some exceptions have happened... - not sure about this one, is it supposed to be 'because he's an animal favorite too. Almost all animals like him... though there have been exceptions.'
Never give in to emotions > Never gives in to emotions
car mind > clear mind (?)
recent events have meant that they are words of the past > recent events have shown that this may be a thing of the past
Thinks first and then does > Thinks first and does second
but one crisis to another have > but one crisis after the other have
unhesitatingly help others selflessly > helps others selflessly
heay weights on his chests > heavy weights on his chest
, carries a sturdy mental fortitude > . He carries a sturdy mental fortitude
highest price for it, with his own life > highest price for it: his own life

@Animetion24 I am really impressed with your wording overall, but wonder if some parts wouldn't be better with punctuation instead of ellipses? For example with '... He knew what would waiting for him and knew the consequences of own actions... He always improved everyone's mood and exhibited the bright side of life - thanks to him everyone learned to believe that everything was possible...' lots of ellipses for one paragraph there in particular.

Also maybe worth knowing that text within parenthesis generally isn't capitalized from a grammatical standpoint, unless what's included is a standalone sentence, punctuation and all. I notice there's a fair bit of this, for example with 'No longer a prancer (He boasted before), he has taken...'

May be a stylistic choice but I thought I'd at least point it out, haven't commented on those bits above.

Hope that helps!

OK, thanks, @Cyberdevil!
I fixed it!

I don't know about "better with punctuation" so I didn't give it. :P

@Cyberdevil Thanks for that, Devil! Yeah, seeing all my mistakes laid out before me really helps. Ugh, the "car mind" particularly bugs me; I tend to tap my keys lightly when writing out longer sentences, and sometimes too light, which might attribute to the lost "le".

I didn't know about the parentheses part; good to read up on.

Nice, guys! Good job! I'm proud of you!

@Animetion24 Ah that explains the clear mind bit! Thought it might've been a spell checking err of some sort. They don't always suggest the right words in all situations...

For sure. :)