@Anonymous-Frog @Mejson That doesn't explain why it's on the front page, especially since you pinged everyone involvd.
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It's the 150th Poster!
For me scene ok, dialogues seems to be ok
Nice! Thanks!
@Animetion24, so I understand no need to change?
@Mejson No, sorry for the late arrival. Had a bit going on during the weekend so I couldn't respond. Can't promise you it won't happen more times, it could be a day or two for me to give my input. :c
1 - I imagine by "zoomed on", you mean "zoomed in?" Otherwise there's no issue here.
2 - From here onwards, there's multiple times when the gender pronouns for Candy keeps changing (her head, Mejson glares at him, ground with her fists, he grabs the stone, etc.). Can we confirm the gender? Otherwise some dialogue changes at the bottom.
3-5 - Just dialogue changes
6 - I'm thinking perhaps MariogD could distract Candy away before he begins the conversation with an absent Mejson? Like producing a honey treat that he teases Candy with (yes, like a dog) before twirling it afar, causing Candy to dive offscreen with it in hand.
7-9 - Good to go.
10 - If my change to 6 is added in, naturally this will have to include either Candy returning to the scene or Mejson and MariogD approaching him as he enjoys the treat.
11+12 - Fine, though 12 will naturally switch to Candy not always focused on Mejson while seated.
Dialogue:
Mejson: "I will not tolerate this sort of behaviour!" -> "This behavior will not be tolerated!"
Candy: "I want it back!"
Mejson: "It wasn't your pet!" -> "It's not your pet to take back!"
Candy: "I wanna! I wanna! I wanna!"
MariogD: "What the hell?!" > "What the Hell's going on here?"
MariogD: "What's going on here?!" -> "Is it now raining rocks?!" (For the sake of variety; I noticed how they are both saying the same word to begin their sentences three times. And such an odd statement wouldn't be surprising to get Mejson out of his shocked phase)
Mejson: "What?"
MariogD: "Are you trying to become his father, again?" -> "Still trying to be his father again?"
Mejson: "Ready?"
MariogD: "Are you okay?" -> "Hey, you alright there?"
Mejson: "Yes"
Mejson: "You don't always get what you want..."
Mejson: "...but you can always count on us... your family"
As for the Discord, I will give it some more thought later.
No problem, I understand. It happens.
1. This is exactly what it means.
2. I sometimes get confused, all characters are masculine.
3 - 5. Ok.
6. No, we don't make Candy a clown anymore, but a young man with problems.
7 - 9. Ok.
10. No changes to 6.
11 - 12. The camera is focused on both of them.
Thanks for your help and improving the dialogues.
Congrats on the 150th! :) Not sure I noticed that break, but anyway... another great part. Really great work with all of these @Animetion24
As for the Discord idea, I wonder if people do mind reading this in advance, does feel like maybe a strange thing to frontpage - maybe you'd reserve that more for posts that you want everyone to read - but personally I'd like being able to read up on planning drafts of other series too. It's a fun insight, and the more transparent artists are about their work the more I personally appreciate them, can never have too much behind the scenes stuff, if people don't want spoilers there's no need to read this either way. Though maybe it wouldn't be bad with a -----spoilers below - planning for future animation----- line or something to separate introduction from actual planning...
That's just me though, I like NG for anything that's possible to have on NG, feels easier to be involved here too.
Thanks! Yes, I'm glad @Animetion24 is awake :D Hehehe
Maybe so... on the home page appeared because... 150th Poster! XD Also, it seems to me that R3 - Part I... it will take a long time before it arises XD (First the performance of R2: Pass of Time - Part II). People have time to forget twice XD
Hell yeah! :D For sure. plenty of time both for people to forget and/or to really get curious with these drafts and tune in when the time comes. ;) Though maybe a little confusing for the newcomer too. Anyway I personally don't mind it being this way at all.
Good to hear that! :P
I missed you mate! :)
Much obliged man. :) Missed you and all the great people around here too, though must confess there's a lot about the civilized world I did not miss! XD Back to work ugh...
Thanks, nice to hear that! It's known... work XD
It's strange how barely anybody seems to really like to work. XD We're all working with the wrong things hmm!
Anonymous-Frog
You know these posts here are public and everyone can see them (spoilers). Why not share this on a private Discord server?
Mejson
Yes, I know...
First of all, people have become fast consumers and probably no one wants to read it anyway.
Secondly, it will be 15 months before the animation is released and everyone will forget what it was about.
Third, we're using Discord, but the whole team doesn't have time to meet and everyone writes when they have time here.
Fourth, it's great documentation that I can look to wherever we are.