Which scene do you find more ambitious? For me the ants ambush is comparable but still seems to be a lesser scene.
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It's hard for me to say, each one is unique and perfectly planned - we do not bore the viewer in any of them :) THIS is thanks to the merit of the entire team.
Was not expecting that Sparta reference. XD This is one intense fight... feels like Mejson probably will win this one way or another, being main protagonist and leader and all, and even more so now that the trial's been overcome; he's getting back on his feet for a second attempt... really split the scene at the cliffhanger here though. :)
Did make some ambitious resolutions for the New Year btw but not much time to work on them yet! How about you/everyone?
Great scene.
Why? :P Very popular in Poland and we enjoy it! XD
Yes, the most intense fight we've ever planned :P
Well, it may looks like that... but what is your certainty? :P We don't approach it this way - the leader is the undefeated leader XD Don't be so sure XD
Well my resolutions are average, but I try to XD
Thanks!
Well I just haven't heard it in a long time. XD It's a classic!
Ahh is it possible this may not go the way it seems after all?! All the more exciting then! :D My certainly is potentially unjustified for sure, it's just how it seems to be to me. Though it's nice when things don't go as you expect them too sometimes it'd be a shame if he lost his role as a leader...
Maybe they're a bit more realistic than mine though that way. :) Might be a good thing. As long as we have the required resolve it's all a steady stream of incremental improvement!!!
Yes, a classic! Sometimes it happens XD
How does it seem? : P What do you think? Yes, very exciting! xD
Well, possible: P Cool :)
Hehehehe, well... who knows :P Certainly the viewer will not predict what will happen XD
Indeed!
"Listen up!" ==> “Alright, listen up!
"We're sitting like a bump on the log, we got to move!" ==> “We’re sitting like bumps on a log, we gotta move!”
"You think 'this crap' is going to help you survive, don't you?" ==> “You think loitering around like this is gonna help us survive?”
"Mejson daydreams all the time and he doesn't fucking do anything!" ==> “All Mejson does is daydreaming about God knows what and doing absolutely nothing!”
"Losses are indispensable..." ==> “Losses are inevitable”
"He's in a coma, and he's not going to get out of this!" ==> “He’s in a coma, ain’t no way he’s getting out of this!”
"What is this congregation?" ==> “What’s all the racket?”
"He's right and that's what I like most about Mejson..." ==> “He’s right… and that’s what I like most about Mejson….” (Adds space after saying, He’s right, so that it sounds more natural)
"Bott* goes crazy again..." ==> “Bott*’s going nuts again…”
"It's not what..." ==> “That’s not what I…”
"What people these days..." ==> “Ughh, people these days…”
"Huh! In their eyes you are not as cool as you think" ==> "Huh! Did you see that Mejson, no one believes in you anymore…”
"Do something! You're out of control!" ==> “Do something! You’re just gonna let him walk after that?!”
"Now!" ==> “What are you waiting for? Show him who’s boss!”
"Hey! I want to say something too!" ==> “Hey! Cut it! I have something to say…”
"Serious mistake..." ==> “Big Mistake…”
"Don't even mention him!" ==> “Don’t you dare mention his name!”
"Or what?" ==> “Oh yeah? What are you gonna do about it?”
"Damn!" ==> “Goddammit!”
"That's the leader?" ==> “You see that everyone? That’s your leader right there”
"Now we talking!" ==> “Now we’re talking!”
"It's really necessary?" ==> “Is it really necessary?”
"Sooo fucking necessary!" ==> “Oh it’s veeerrryy fuckin’ necessary!”
"Are you crazy?!" ==> “Are you out of your mind?!”
"Fuck this!" ==> “Let’s do this!”
"Sooo sharply!" ==> “ouuuu so sharp!”
Keni regains her balance ==> Keni’s a girl lol
then wipes her mouth with her hand ==> girl Keni XD
"Quite well, but..." ==> “Not bad, but…”
"This is your limit, old man!" ==> “You’ve reached your limit, old man!”
"Rough!" ==> “Ooohhhh, that’s gotta hurt!”
The camera quickly goes to Bott*, he screams, raising her hands ==> gender ambiguity
"You disappointed me!" ==> “You disappoint me…” (uses present tense, cause the even is still going)
"Hey! That's enough!" ==> “Alright! That’s enough!”
That’s all, the rest of the dialogue is great for me.
Thanks, great dialogues :P Nice ideas!
@Cyberdevil I’ve been preparing for my future throughout the whole January. Looking for flight schools, looking for sound design courses and learning how to organize your money.
Also, I’ve been working on the reduce song that hopefully @Cyberdevil can sing/rap to. You can collab with other singers if you want too. Hopefully the instrumental can be done this February.
Uuuuuuu quite important and meaningful :) With sound design too? Uhuhmmm :)
Yes! This song sounds amazing! :D
Always a nice surprise when it does. :D
Well I'm not sure what to think at this point. XD I still suspect Mejson (with Steve's help) will probably come out unscathed after this one, but not so certain now...
For sure!
It's nice that there is a surprise!
Oh dear, unscathed? <pause> well... XD
@ChordC ah that sounds awesome. :D Looking forward to it; hope I'm ready to go whenever you're ready!
Flight schools and sound design courses?! Unexpectedly diverse fields there! Been attending a lot of health webinars this month myself; trying to get my life in order a bit too. Best of luck with those endeavors!
Hey guys! Giving it a quick read, I do enjoy the dynamic of the characters and the build up to the contest.
Will provide more scene-by-scene observations later this week; I'm quite busy during the week's start right now and will try to find a moment probably by evening my time tomorrow.
Meanwhile, here's some dialogue suggestions (A lot of it is advocating @ChordC 's suggestions too):
Keni: "Ok, let's do this"
Keni: "Listen up!"
Keni: "We're sitting like a bump on the log, we got to move!" -> "We're sitting like bumps on a log. We need to move on!"
Bott*: "What's going on?"
Rash: "Shhh!"
Keni: "We're wasting time here!"
Keni: "You think 'this crap' is going to help you survive, don't you?" -> "Do you really think sitting on your asses will help you survive?
Bott*: "Is this some kind of joke?"
Keni: "Mejson daydreams all the time and he doesn't fucking do anything!" -> "Aside from entertaining us with his daydreams, he's not doing anything!"
MariogD: "What about Bill?"
Keni: <sighs>
Keni: "Losses are indispensable..." -> "Losses are inevitable..."
Keni: "He's in a coma, and he's not going to get out of this!" -> "He's in a coma. Even he knows he wouldn't make it!"
Bott*: "There is no war without casualties..."
Mejson: "What is this congregation?" -> "What's this meeting about?"
Keni: "There are dead bodies following Mejson!"
Bott*: "He's right and that's what I like most about Mejson..."
Mazurek: "Bott* goes crazy again..." -> "Bott*'s speaking nonsense again."
Mazurek: <sighs>
Mazurek: "Bott* for God’s sake calm down..."
Mejson: "Do you think so, too?"
MariogD: "Well, a lot of people have died... but..."
Keni: "See!?"
Keni: "Even his brother lost faith in him!"
MariogD: "It's not what..." -> "That's not what I m-"
Rash: "What do the others think?"
MariogD: "Dicks…"
Mazurek: "What people these days..." -> "What have people become these days...?"
Keni: "Huh! In their eyes you are not as cool as you think"
Steve: "Do something! You're out of control!"
Steve: "Now!"
Mejson: "You..."
Delsin: "Hey! I want to say something too!" -> "Listen up, all of you! I have something to say!"
Delsin: "I support him, he is our leader!" -> "I support our leader!"
Rash: "Who the fuck are you?!"
Mejson: "Leave him alone, he's also one of us!"
Keni: "Do you even..."
Mejson: "Shut up!"
Mejson: <sighs>
Mejson: "Do you want to be a leader?"
Mejson: "Look at yourself!"
Mejson: "You aren't ready..."
Mejson: "You impatient and hot-tempered and more importantly..." -> "You're impatient, beyond hot-tempered, and most importantly..."
Mejson: "I'm better than you..."
Bott*: "Yea, my man!"
Keni: "Hahahahaha..."
Keni: "Oh, ya know something, my 'leader'?"
Keni: "At least I haven't lost anyone..."
Mejson: "How dare you?!"
Keni: "I wonder if Steve would have thought the same?" -> "I wonder, if Steve was here, would he turn his back on you too?"
Delsin: "Serious mistake..." -> "Uncalled for..."
Mejson: "Don't even mention him!"
Keni: "Or what?"
Mejson: "Shut up!"
Keni: "Heh..."
Keni: "Fuck Steve!"
Mejson: "You asshole!"
Mejson: "Damn!"
Keni: "You're so predictable"
Keni: "That's the leader?" -> "This is our leader, everyone?!"
Keni: "Pathetic…"
Bott*: "Time for the slaughter!"
Keni: "Now we talking!" -> Now we're talking!"
Mazurek: "It's really necessary?" -> "Is this really necessary?"
Rash: "Sooo fucking necessary!" -> "Super fucking necessary!!"
MariogD: "Are you crazy?!"
Mejson: "Fuck this!" -> "Fuck you!"
Keni: <little groan of pain>
Mejson: "That's for Steve!"
Bott*: "Yeah! Go, Mejson!"
MariogD: "Ohh, shiiit!"
Keni: "Not bad"
Bott*: "Sooo sharply!" -> "Oooooo, sharp!"
MariogD: "Are you ok, bro?!"
Mejson: "It's nothing!"
Keni: "What?!"
Keni: <groan of pain>
Rash: "Damn, impossible..." -> "Damn. Can hardly believe it..."
Delsin: "Well-played, Mr. Mejson!"
Bott*: "Impressive!"
Mejson: <breathing heavily>
Keni: "Quite well, but..." -> "Not bad..."
Keni: "This is your limit, old man!" -> "But you have nothing left, old-timer!"
Mejson: "It remains to be seen..." -> "That remains to be seen."
Mejson: <groan of pain>
Bott*: "Rough!" -> "Brutal!"
Rash: <laughter>
Delsin: "Don't give up, Mr. Mejson!"
Mejson: <groans of pain>
Bott*: "This is Sparta!"
Mazurek: <sighs>
Mazurek: "Bott*, please..."
Keni: "You disappointed me!" -> "You disappoint me, Mejson!"
Keni: "I expected more..."
Mejson: "Fuck you!"
Keni: <bursts out laughing>
Mejson: "You..."
Mejson: <yells in pain>
Mejson: <moans of pain>
Bott*: "Danse macabre!"
MariogD: "Hey! That's enough!"
Keni: "I'm done with you"
Steve: "Fuck! It didn't go too well..."
Mejson: "Well, you don't say!"
Steve: <sighs>
Steve: "I have an idea, but you have to trust me..."
Mejson: "Do I have a choice?"
Steve: "No, not really"
Mejson: "Okay, what do you mean?" -> "Alright, what's your idea?"
Steve: "Give me control..."
Mejson: "All riiight..." -> "Very well."
Steve: "Close your eyes..."
@ChordC and @Animetion24 thanks for your help. We will decide with @SayMeBott @Mazurek and @Mejson which one to use.
Hey there, guys!
I really started to think that if this scene planning is that good, I cannot imagine how great this movie of this saga can be!
Mejson, I always saw you and MariogD confront each other in CS series, so I cannot quite guess how your new rival Keni can behave and move against you. It's also a miracle to see you and MariogD and others surviving together at all costs! I will create time someday to read the whole transcript of this scene. :)
Regards,
- MATRVG
Hey homie!
Well... fucking good! XD This season is going to be so good that 4 out of 5 is the minimum! Well planned and executed, and long :P
Not only in CS XD My brother and I sometimes have different views :P Well... you will see in the distant future. :) The whole scene? Well... the others aren't too small either XD
PS. I would love to see you in my fans :) How's your animation?
Regards,
Mejson
I think Reduce sana deserve 6/5 score lol
You are planning a scene for weeks. What about me? Er... What I did as teaser clips just took me 20 minutes to plan them xD ZERO JOKE! I woke up for bathroom, sit down on closet and planned 45 clips. After that, I slept. 4 hours later, I went to work xD
If God graces, I will keep being your fan, like ı was when I was child :) I have stopped temporarily because of overtime working. But I will start again.
Regards,
MATRVG
No, don't overdo it XD I think in reasonable ranges.
Yes, we are planning 'THIS' scene a long time, I'm going to finish today :P
It's kind of sparingly :) That's good, you'll be able to move on to animating. I understand :)
Remember that at a later age you will not be able to do that anymore XD I had this too :P
The way he gave it, you can click 'FALLOWING' and you will! xD
MariogD
Definitely most ambitious scene in Reduce Saga. I have a lot of fun creating it!
Mejson
I don't thing that the most ambitious, but certainly the most difficult to plan and execute. I have two days off. After the morning gym I will work on planning. I am currently at point 50.