Welcome everyone!
It's a next scene planning/draft - this time it's: Scene 7 - Brutal Ambush to Reduce 2 - Pass of Time - the first and also only addition to Reduce 2 :P
Scene 1 - Run and hide! - Approved!
Scene 2 - Our "friend" - Approved!
Scene 3 - A New Hope - Approved!
Scene 4 - A New Beginning - Approved!
Scene 5 - Still Alive! - Approved!
Scene 6 - Opposite Emotions - Approved!
However, I want to say: I'm finish working on map and all the necessary elements (navigation, icons, texts and buttons) and adventure details (texts, descriptions, navigation). :)
If you want, you can see the project overview - I have already added (also .exe).
Scene 7 - Brutal Ambush
Inscription (on black background):
Episode 7
Day 16
(~1 day later)
6:54 AM
Action:
1. The camera shows 3 Ant Zombies - two are directed to the left and one to the right.
2. Suddenly the camera moves to the right arena and zooms in on the grass, Rash is hidden there (his head is sticking out).
3. Zoom the camera on Rash, who looks at the viewer (breaking 3 walls) and smiles maliciously.
4. Next Rash looks at the Ant Zombie and grows serious, the camera suddenly zooms out, and Rash runs out (he has a stone in his hand) and throws it at the Ant Zombie (it is alone) - the camera shows the throw.
5. Ant Zombie gets pissed and runs towards Rash, camera on Rash - runs to the right. Blackout.
Another inscription (on black background):
(~10 minutes later)
7:04 AM
Continuation of the action:
6. The camera shows the trap (a large stone on 4 wooden pillars - raised and held by lianas), and then zooms the camera on Mazurek (he look focused - with squint one’s eyes), and then on Keni, who is very smiling (he has a scary expression on his face).
7. Suddenly Rush runs into a trap, (he's sweaty), next he's sliding - he's beyond the trap, and after a while Ant Zombie. Mazurek pulls the lever and stone is falling rapidly, which press Ant Zombie to the ground.
8. The camera shows Keni running up to Ant Zombie, next he stab / pierce (with cruelty in his eyes) the head of Ant Zombie who dies. Keni says (almost screams in triumph): "Die bitch!" and hits the spear again (unnecessarily).
9. The camera on Rash, who looks at Keni a bit surprised (by his behavior), breathes heavily and says / screams hoarsely: "Don't get excited! We have one kill each. You aren't winning yet!"
10. Mazurek says calmly (a bit disgusted): "You behave like a children" and looks at them with pity.
11. Keni and Rash ignore these words and look at each other and smile (a bit malicious, but friendly). Keni looks up and down at Rash and says (maliciously): "I see that your cardio is poor" and Rash (smiling) replies: "Fuck off!"
12. Mazurek breaks the silence and says: "Let's get to work".
Light effect:
Yellow (early morning).
Dialogues:
Keni: "Die bitch!"
Rash: "Don't get excited! We have one kill each. You aren't winning yet!"
Mazurek: "You behave like a children"
Keni: "I see that your cardio is poor"
Rash: "Fuck off!"
Mazurek: "Let's get to work"
AzureDragoonGX
Aside from some dialogue adjustments, I think this scene works just fine too. The first one where Rash says "And so there is a draw" I am a bit unclear on though; is he indicating that they have been keeping track of their kill counts up to this point and Rash acknowledges that they are currently even? It seems as though he's talking instead about the damage they have done to this particular ant, but if so Keni probably won there; after all, Rash was just a diversion. :J
Maybe we could have Keni and Rash also roll their eyes at Mazurek's snark and then wrap arm shoulders before the snide remarks they have for each other, with Rash pushing him off after Keni insults his cardio too. It would probably illustrate the expressions in the scene a lot more.
This final thing, it's not necessarily for this scene but for future parts. Are you saving acid and spitting ants for something good later? I think the Heroes could start making through with revamps to the standard enemies they've been facing now that they seem to be able to defeat them in any way that isn't a complete ambush (which eventually, the Heroes too ought to be able to find ways to prevent).