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Reduce 2 - Pass of Time - Scene 10 (Planning/Draft)

Posted by Mejson - August 28th, 2020


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Welcome everyone!


It's a another scene planning/draft - this time it's: Scene 10 - Disagreement to Reduce 2 - Pass of Time - the first and also only addition to Reduce 2 :)


Scene 1 - Run and hide! - Approved!

Scene 2 - Our "friend" - Approved!

Scene 3 - A New Hope - Approved!

Scene 4 - A New Beginning - Approved!

Scene 5 - Still Alive! - Approved!

Scene 6 - Opposite Emotions - Approved!

Scene 7 - Brutal Ambush - Approved!

Scene 8 - "Wrong Number" - Approved!

Scene 9 - Funny Situation - Approved!


For this animation (Reduce 2 - Pass of Time) the voice to the characters will be made by artists:

  • Zip to hero: Zip,
  • Mazurek to hero: Mazurek,
  • Plasmarift to hero: Mejson, Havoc, Rash and Keni


Scene 10 - Disagreement

Inscription (on black background):

Episode 10
Day 21
(~1 day later)
9:33 PM


Action:

1. The camera shows the heroes lying down (there is total silence - you only hear the "night" muse), suddenly Rash says (thinks) to himself: "I wanna get wasted".
2. Outraged Keni scolds him with the words: "Fuck, now I feel like it too", and then adds "You had to, didn't you?"
3. After a while Rash shouts to Mazurek, who cannot be seen on the stage: "Mazurek, would you like to drink vodka?"
4. Suddenly Mazurek runs up and shouts excitedly: "Do you have something to drink?!". Rash replies: "No... I was curious if you would like to drink one" and Rash smiles.
5. Mazurek, disgusted and disappointed, says: "Go fuck yourself!" and comes back slowly and he says to himself: "*sigh* It's been too long since I had some good wine...".
6. At the moment when he says the last sentence - zoom the camera on Zip, whose eyes are closing (the sound stops / echo).
7. RETROSPECTIVE (sepia shades). Zip with Mazurka enter the conference room (in the middle there is a long table where Havoc, Mejson, MariogD and Don Pawelo are sitting (he's sitting at the end of the table - a bit in the distance)).
8. Mejson is in the middle of saying, "...And then we will save many human lives" (he says this to Havoc), and after a while Havoc replies: "And what might we get out of it?".
9. Suddenly, Zip jokingly says (smiling and sitting down at the table): "I'm counting on a Nobel Prize!". Mazurek (also sits down) smiles. Mejson doesn't react to Zip's teasing, and Havoc just glares at Zip for a second, then at Mejson.
10. After a while, Mejson continues rhetorically (as if to anyone specifically): "Somebody forgot why we are here..." and Havoc says (already a bit moved): "Don't be so idealist!", And then adds: "I believe we should all be handsomely rewarded for this 'spectacular invention'!"
11. Suddenly, Mazurek (who has been silent so far) interjects: "And who would offer us this 'handsome payment'?" (he says it ironically).
12. Mejson looks at Havoc and asks: "I hope you don't mean the army?" Havoc replies evasively (doesn't deny it), "And what's wrong with that?" (firmly).
13. Outraged Mejson jumps up from his chair (puts his hands on the table top) and shouts: "Are you crazy?!", and then adds: "The last thing we should do is to sell something to the army!"
14. Havoc looks at Mejson for a moment, and then to everyone else (even at Don Pawelo). Everyone is surprised (except Mejson and Havoc).
15. This awkward silence is broken by Mazurek: "I don't want to say it but Mejson is right", Havoc looks at him and slowly nods his head, then looks at the table blankly.
16. Mejson says in general: "We're done". Everyone gets up and starts to leave.
17. At one point Havoc (he is almost alone) looks up and squint one’s eyes and eyebrows, then camera zooms in to him. Havoc looks at the viewer (towards the screen) and smiles ominously (scary_moment sound) - it takes a few seconds.
18. Zip is awakened by the voice of Mazurek (who turns to Keni): "Now it's your watch" (several hours have passed). Blackout.


Dialogues:

Rash: "I wanna get wasted"
Keni: "Fuck, now I feel like it too"
Keni: "You had to, didn't you?"
Rash: "Mazurek, would you like to drink vodka?"
Mazurek: "Do you have something to drink?!"
Rash: "No... I was curious if you would like to drink one"
Mazurek: "Go fuck yourself!"
Mazurek: "*sigh* It's been too long since I had some good wine..."
Mejson: "...And then we will save many human lives"
Havoc: "And what might we get out of it?"
Zip: "I'm counting on a Nobel Prize!"
Mejson: "Somebody forgot why we are here..."
Havoc: "Don't be so idealist!"
Havoc: "I believe we should all be handsomely rewarded for this 'spectacular invention'!"
Mazurek: "And who would offer us this 'handsome payment'?"
Mejson: "I hope you don't mean the army?"
Havoc: "And what's wrong with that?"
Mejson: "Are you crazy?!"
Mejson: "The last thing we should do is to sell something to the army!"
Mazurek: "I don't want to say it but Mejson is right"
Mejson: "We're done"
Mazurek: "Now it's your watch"

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Comments

Two small additions, then some dialog corrections as far as I can see.

Mazurek could probably be leaving the conversation with Keni and Rash lamenting the fact that he no longer has his wine (as was his signature in the CS days), along the lines of "*sigh* It's been too long since I had some good wine..." And the sentence blurs out as the camera focuses on Zip going back to an old memory.

Inside the memory, when Havoc starts to have his outrage with the other conference members and he looks to Don Pawelo, you probably had in mind that the latter wasn't keen on the whole army idea either, but to best represent that, we should either have him calmly shake his head (if he's more confident against Havoc) or act surprised with raised shoulders upon getting Havoc's stare and then rolling his eyes away to avoid contact (if he isn't).

Now for dialog:

Mejson: "... And then we will save many human beings" -> "... With this, we will save so many human lives."
Havoc: "And will we get out of it?" -> "And what might we get out of it?"
Havoc: "Don't be such idealist!" -> "Don't be so idealistic!/Don't be so narrow-minded!"
Havoc: "I think all of us here deserve a handsome payment for this spectacular invention!" -> "I believe we should all be handsomely rewarded for this spectacular invention.
Mazurek: "And who would offer us this 'handsome payment'?"-> "And who do you think would handsomely reward us?"
Mejson: "I hope you don't mean (the) army?"

Two of these great ideas - incredible!

Too much (I don't change):

Mejson: "... And then we will save many human beings" -> "... With this, we will save so many human lives."

Havoc: "Don't be such idealist!" -> "Don't be so idealistic!/Don't be so narrow-minded!"

Mazurek: "And who would offer us this 'handsome payment'?"-> "And who do you think would handsomely reward us?"

Mejson: "I hope you don't mean (the) army?"

@Animetion24 seems you're taking over the grammar checks. :) Improvements and all too.

Just dug up a few more:

"You had to, haven't you?" > "You had to, didn't you?"
"I'm counting on Nobel Prize!" > "I'm counting on a/the Nobel Prize!"
"The last thing we should do is to sell something to army!" > "The last thing we should do is to sell something to the army!"

Ok I corrected!

Good scene too.

I change it:

Mejson: "...And then we will save many human beings" -> " "...And then we will save many human lives"

Havoc: "Don't be such idealist!" -> "Don't be so idealist!"

@Cyberdevil, Animetion24@ thank you for your help! :)

Bott*: "Yeah! Just bring me vodka or cheap wine - whatever!"

What you're hinting at, Bott*? XD

@Mejson I'm not quite sure.. That's what I thought after reading scene description.. I think that points 3, 4, 5 captivated me..