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Reduce 3 - Scene 3 (Planning/Draft)

Posted by Mejson - September 11th, 2021


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Welcome crew and NG people!


It was a moment of break, but sometimes a moment of rest is everything you need. :P


Happy birthday to everyone! It's the 150th Poster we have here! Congratulations to everyone who has contributed to this success!


What do you think about it, @Cyberdevil@Animetion24@ChordC@MariogD@SayMeBott?


Regards,

Mejson


Scene 3 - Family

Inscription (on black background):

Episode 3
Day 28
(~6 hours later)
5:07 PM


Action:

1. Camera zoomed on: Mejson and Candy are standing opposite each other (a bit further back in the camp). Candy acts like a spoiled kid, bursting with anger and adolescent frustration. Mejson has dark circles under his eye and is clearly tired (as you can see, these are the obvious causes of frustration and aggression).

2. Mejson (firmly and angrily): "This behavior will not be tolerated!", Candy shaking her head and hands angrily screams (still having autistic reflexes): "I want it back!" Mejson glares at him angrily and rests his hands on his hips, then says, "It's not your pet to take back!".

3. Candy sits down abruptly on the ground and hits the ground with her fists (repeatedly) screaming: "I wanna! I wanna! I wanna!". Then he grabs the stone and stands up quickly, then throws it angrily straight ahead. The stone passes Mejson's head and flies past the right edge of the screen.

4. Mejson shudders (instinctively) and freezes in stunned (his eye freezes for a moment). At the same time, you can hear MariogD in surprise (a bit quieter because he's off-screen): "What the Hell's going on here?". Candy is also shocked for a moment, then sits down on the ground and stares at the ground in embarrassment.

5. MariogD comes up with the stone in his hand and says in a raised voice (almost screams): "Is it now raining rocks?!" MariogD's words broke Mejson from his stupor (he turns his head towards MariogD): "What?". Meanwhile, Candy looks embarrassed (for a moment) at MariogD, then down again.

6. Mejson makes a worried face. MariogD quickly calms down (seeing Mejson's reaction) and smiles, then says: "Still trying to be his father again?". The camera zooms in on Mejson's face, who blinks (looks absent). Effect similar to Zip's dream (white effects) - Mejson remembers something.

7. The camera shows Mejson walking uphill (not too steep, some quiet route). He is wearing a backpack and accessories. Then he pauses for a moment, turns around, and waits. The camera moves to the right to the other person. This is Candy 's father (the viewer can only guess that). Also is wearing a backpack and accessories.

8. His skin color is similar to Candy. He walks over to Mejson and supports itself on his shoulder, breathes for a while (there are drops of sweat on his forehead), then straightens up. They both look at each other and smile. After a while, Mejson asks: "Ready?". Candy's father nods.

9. Next they continue to go up the hill together. After a while, Candy's father begins to slow down (he can't handle rate and sweats more and more). Then he falls to his knee, panting heavily. Mejson turns and runs to him and also crouches close to him and puts him hand on his shoulder (he's worried). White effect (return to reality).

10. MariogD shakes Mejson and asks anxiously, "Hey, you alright there?" Mejson blinks and regains focus and replies indifferently: "Yes". Mejson turns his head and looks at the seated Candy. His expression changes to indulgent and gentle.

11. He then crouches down (the camera zooms in on them) and puts his hand on Candy's shoulder and says: "You don't always get what you want..." and then adds: "...but you can always count on us... your family". Then smiles at Candy.

12. Candy, who had been watching Mejson attentively (from the moment he crouched down) nodded, then smiled to Mejson. Blackout.


Light effect:

Gray (evening).


Dialogues:

Mejson: "This behavior will not be tolerated!"
Candy: "I want it back!"
Mejson: "It's not your pet to take back!"
Candy: "I wanna! I wanna! I wanna!"
MariogD: "What the Hell's going on here?"
MariogD: "Is it now raining rocks?!"
Mejson: "What?"
MariogD: "Still trying to be his father again?"
Mejson: "Ready?"
MariogD: "Hey, you alright there?"
Mejson: "Yes"
Mejson: "You don't always get what you want..."
Mejson: "...but you can always count on us... your family"

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Comments

You know these posts here are public and everyone can see them (spoilers). Why not share this on a private Discord server?

Yes, I know...

First of all, people have become fast consumers and probably no one wants to read it anyway.

Secondly, it will be 15 months before the animation is released and everyone will forget what it was about.

Third, we're using Discord, but the whole team doesn't have time to meet and everyone writes when they have time here.

Fourth, it's great documentation that I can look to wherever we are.

@Anonymous-Frog @Mejson That doesn't explain why it's on the front page, especially since you pinged everyone involvd.

It's the 150th Poster!

For me scene ok, dialogues seems to be ok

Nice! Thanks!

@Animetion24, so I understand no need to change?

@Mejson No, sorry for the late arrival. Had a bit going on during the weekend so I couldn't respond. Can't promise you it won't happen more times, it could be a day or two for me to give my input. :c

1 - I imagine by "zoomed on", you mean "zoomed in?" Otherwise there's no issue here.

2 - From here onwards, there's multiple times when the gender pronouns for Candy keeps changing (her head, Mejson glares at him, ground with her fists, he grabs the stone, etc.). Can we confirm the gender? Otherwise some dialogue changes at the bottom.

3-5 - Just dialogue changes

6 - I'm thinking perhaps MariogD could distract Candy away before he begins the conversation with an absent Mejson? Like producing a honey treat that he teases Candy with (yes, like a dog) before twirling it afar, causing Candy to dive offscreen with it in hand.

7-9 - Good to go.

10 - If my change to 6 is added in, naturally this will have to include either Candy returning to the scene or Mejson and MariogD approaching him as he enjoys the treat.

11+12 - Fine, though 12 will naturally switch to Candy not always focused on Mejson while seated.

Dialogue:
Mejson: "I will not tolerate this sort of behaviour!" -> "This behavior will not be tolerated!"

Candy: "I want it back!"

Mejson: "It wasn't your pet!" -> "It's not your pet to take back!"

Candy: "I wanna! I wanna! I wanna!"

MariogD: "What the hell?!" > "What the Hell's going on here?"

MariogD: "What's going on here?!" -> "Is it now raining rocks?!" (For the sake of variety; I noticed how they are both saying the same word to begin their sentences three times. And such an odd statement wouldn't be surprising to get Mejson out of his shocked phase)

Mejson: "What?"

MariogD: "Are you trying to become his father, again?" -> "Still trying to be his father again?"

Mejson: "Ready?"

MariogD: "Are you okay?" -> "Hey, you alright there?"

Mejson: "Yes"

Mejson: "You don't always get what you want..."

Mejson: "...but you can always count on us... your family"

As for the Discord, I will give it some more thought later.

No problem, I understand. It happens.

1. This is exactly what it means.

2. I sometimes get confused, all characters are masculine.

3 - 5. Ok.

6. No, we don't make Candy a clown anymore, but a young man with problems.

7 - 9. Ok.

10. No changes to 6.

11 - 12. The camera is focused on both of them.

Thanks for your help and improving the dialogues.

Congrats on the 150th! :) Not sure I noticed that break, but anyway... another great part. Really great work with all of these @Animetion24

As for the Discord idea, I wonder if people do mind reading this in advance, does feel like maybe a strange thing to frontpage - maybe you'd reserve that more for posts that you want everyone to read - but personally I'd like being able to read up on planning drafts of other series too. It's a fun insight, and the more transparent artists are about their work the more I personally appreciate them, can never have too much behind the scenes stuff, if people don't want spoilers there's no need to read this either way. Though maybe it wouldn't be bad with a -----spoilers below - planning for future animation----- line or something to separate introduction from actual planning...

That's just me though, I like NG for anything that's possible to have on NG, feels easier to be involved here too.

Thanks! Yes, I'm glad @Animetion24 is awake :D Hehehe

Maybe so... on the home page appeared because... 150th Poster! XD Also, it seems to me that R3 - Part I... it will take a long time before it arises XD (First the performance of R2: Pass of Time - Part II). People have time to forget twice XD

Hell yeah! :D For sure. plenty of time both for people to forget and/or to really get curious with these drafts and tune in when the time comes. ;) Though maybe a little confusing for the newcomer too. Anyway I personally don't mind it being this way at all.

Good to hear that! :P

I missed you mate! :)

Much obliged man. :) Missed you and all the great people around here too, though must confess there's a lot about the civilized world I did not miss! XD Back to work ugh...

Thanks, nice to hear that! It's known... work XD

It's strange how barely anybody seems to really like to work. XD We're all working with the wrong things hmm!