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Reduce 3 - Scene 13 (Planning) - Part I

Posted by Mejson - April 12th, 2022


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Welcome everyone!


First thing:

Well, first the latest information on dialogues for the character (to Part II - R3). The work is ongoing and our best people are hard at work to complete this task. :P @Plasmarift - waiting for a few corrections to Keni - 2 and Mejson - 18. @Animetion24 - I received the first part of Delsin and it turned out to be good. I will get 43 more in the future. @Cyberdevil - I'm still waiting for 38 fixes for MariogD. Thank you to everyone for your hard work and great recordings!


Main thing:

As you have noticed, Scene 13 has been divided into two parts by convention. For convenience, as this scene is correspondingly longer. This passage is devoted to part I - Mate's dream, which has never had such before... Why? Well, let's see what the future holds.


Extra thing:

As you may have noticed, Matt's character has a beard. In the future, we'll be experimenting with our characters' facial hair. We'll see how it works - in R3 it's the beginning of week 3 of this adventure, and the heroes don't necessarily shave each other. We'll see how it works out, for example Mejson could have a mustache. I don't know if they will fit. XD


What do you think about it, @Cyberdevil@Animetion24@ChordC@MariogD@SayMeBott@Colizza@XavierDalton@MATRVG?


Regards,

Mejson


Scene 13 - Dilemmas

Inscription (on black background):

Episode 13
Day 38
(~1 day later)
7:28 AM


Action:

1. The scene begins by the unknown warehouse. There are various objects here; such as: ventilation, cabinet for wheels (motorcycle), cabinets for various equipment - equipment (single and double), supply crates (various sizes), barrel (with gasoline or crude oil - not important). The colors of the floor and walls are in shades of gray. There is a painting on the wall with a specific text and a picture (black colors) - at the top: "MY GARAGE", in the middle: <simplified motorcycle shape>, at the bottom: "MY RULES".

2. After a moment of presenting the room (the camera moves from right to left). Suddenly you hear the sound of a garage door opening (not shown to the viewer). After a while, Mr. Mate on his motorcycle stops at the left edge of the arena (as pictured above). He has a beautiful motorcycle - so shiny and in shades of claret. Mr. Mate has just returned from a mission; he has an indifferent expression - for him it was a mission like any other. After a while, he straightens up and jumps off the motorcycle.

3. He turns his back and then props the motorcycle - unfolds the motorcycle “leg” (support). He turns again - this time facing the viewer and comfortably props himself against the motorcycle (one leg is straightened and the other leg is curled up). Indifferently, he takes out the phone (the one with fold-out components). When Mr. Mate raises the phone to his head, he automatically unfolds it and dials the number (he probably has the number under speed dial). He begins the conversation indifferently. Camera close-up on Mr. Mate's head and the phone.

4. Mr. Mate says (indifferently): "Targets neutralized". On the left side there is a "bubble" with a phone icon, name - Havoc and the text when he's voice is hearing (flatteringly): "Outstanding job, agent!". Then Mr. Mate smiles to himself smugly and says (smug): "Easy money!". Then you hear a voice on the phone (serious): "That was your last mission...". Next Mr. Mate is seriously and asks (surprised): "What do you mean 'that was the last mission?'". Telephone voice (serious): "You're fired!".

5. Mr. Mate shudders angrily, leaps to his feet and says (annoyed): "What?!", and then adds, regaining his balance quickly (indifferently): "Very well...". Mr. Mate then hangs up the phone without waiting for a response. Mr. Mate squeezes his phone (the sound of a phone being crushed) before hide it, squints one's eyes, and says (darkly): "We shall meet again soon". A moment later he says (darkly): "You will regret this decision..." .After a moment of silence - the expression on Mr. Mate returns to indifference as he stares at the ground. Then he <sighs>, then looks to the right and says (indifferently): "Y'all think you could sneak up on me?".

6. Then he puts his hand to the nape of his neck and closes his eyes at the same time. He moves his head from side to side and his neck causes two concrete <bone crunch>. Next Mr. Mate opens his eyes, stands up, and walks to the right with an indifferent expression on his face. When he goes, he pulls out the knife and twirls it in the air. The camera follows him. Description of the room: behind the motorcycle (by the wall) there is a stand (wardrobe) for motorcycle wheels, and then two garage equipment wardrobes (one double and the other single).

7. Then, at a distance, there are two large crates (of different sizes) and one smaller in front of them (it stands very close). Mr. Mate stops between the cupboard and the first chest some distance from the wall. On the right side there are objects (at a certain distance from the above-mentioned ones): a red and yellow barrel (probably with gasoline), next to it two large crates. In front of the (chests) there are 3 smaller ones (also of different sizes).

8. The first agent is standing in front of the barrel, the second agent is standing with his back with his leg on a small box (animation of tying the shoe), the next agent is leaning against the next box with his arms crossed. The camera does not show what is next. Mr. Mate with an indifferent expression on his face, Mate says (ironically): "Just in time, I was just about to make dinner, y'all want some?".

9. The first agent reacts when he squint one's eyes (angrily but calmly): "We've always hated you, Mate. It's a pity we have orders not to kill you". Mr. Mate raises his eyebrows and replies (ironically): "'Ordered not to?' Don't you mean 'unable to?'". The agent shudders in surprise (for a moment), then quickly raises his hand to point at Mr. Mate (for a moment) and replies (angrily): "Don't get ahead of yourself Mate, hands up!". Mr. Mate shrugs and replies (ironically): "Yep... Business as usual...".

10. The agent takes out a telescopic baton (silver-steel) and unfolds it with a sharp, effective swinger of his hand. Next without any warning, the agent starts running towards Mr. Mate, whose expression becomes serious. A split second later, Mr. Mate also starts running. The camera zooms in as the characters approach each other. Mr. Mate runs a bit up (diagonally) and steps onto a small box. 

11. From this box (one leg), he throws himself (jump) at the opponent and flips him to the ground - the agent falls on his back under the weight of Mr. Mate and <groan of fall>. In a split second, Mr. Mate kills him (stabs knife in the head, blood spurts out). Wasting no time - Mr. Mate quickly pulls out the knife (from agent's head) and stands up, staring straight ahead (with a serious face) as another agent is running over. Mr. Mate takes a few steps back as the agent slides (with dust) with the baton raised (intending to swing - from upper).

12. Mr. Mate leans back as he blocks an agent's attack with his forearm. They wrestle for a moment, Mr. Mate's face is focused and the agent has an angry face and shouts (anger): "You asshole!". Mr. Mate pushes the agent away (with that forearm). The agent leans back (surprised - when pushed away); exposing himself. At the same moment, Mr. Mate leans forward, swings his knife from below and stabs it in the agent's throat. Mr. Mate almost immediately pulls out the knife (blood spurts out a lot), while taking a step back.

13. The agent drops the baton and grabs his throat, blood running down his arm. At the same time he make a <gurgling sounds>. Unfortunately, it's over; he sinks to his knee, and then his hand slowly descends, and he himself falls to the ground. A pool of blood appears under the agent's neck and grows rapidly. Mr. Mate watches it indifferently for a moment, then quickly looks up and his face turns serious again. He quickly stands up and runs (diagonally). The camera follows Mr. Mate.

14. Unexpectedly Mr. Mate jumps and hits the agent with both legs in the torso (dropkick - wrestling attack). Mr. Mate lands on his back; the agent flies backward (diagonally) with a certain force. The agent makes a <groan of pain>, hits the last (smaller) crate and moves over it by his back with <groan of pain>, then lands behind it with <groan of pain> on the ground. The camera returns to Mr. Mate, who gets up from the ground, looks towards the barrel, then runs to it.

15. Next with a quick movement, stick the knife in and pull it out (so that the oil is pouring in place some distance in front of the first crate; the barrel has been damaged quite high so that the contents will not pour out too long). Then he turns and watches the agent. The camera moves to the agent rising from the ground and cursing to himself (embittered): "Shiiit!". Then the agent straightens up and looks at Mr. Mate; the agent squint one's eyes and begins to run towards him - the shortest possible path.

16. Agent jumps on the small crate (on the far right) and moves towards Mr. Mate after another two crates. In the meantime Mr. Mate turns and starts running to the left; he's deliberately jumping over the oil stain. The agent yells (frustration): "Come back here!". The agent is blind by hatred and humiliation. The camera focuses on the spot with the barrel (zoom in). Mr. Mate disappears behind the left edge of the screen. Agent jumps off the crate without even slowing down; he completely doesn't notice the oil stain.

17. Unexpectedly he slips on the stain and reacts (surprised): "Woah?!". He falls on his back hitting his head with <hiss of pain>. Then the agent reacts (painfully): "Damn...". You can hear the creak of a rusty locker opening. The agent starts to rise on his elbows when a screwdriver flies unexpectedly in his direction. A screwdriver gets in the agent's head centrally. The agent falls quickly to the ground without a groan. A fraction of a second later, two more agents are running up from the right.

18. One runs after the other (at a short distance) - in the line of movement before the crates. Just as they pass Mr. Mate's last victim then flat wrench 28 (size) arrives (is flying). Camera zoom in. The first agent avoids the hit - he dodges (slide) towards the wall (he is facing the viewer). Start of slowing effect - both agents have a surprised expression. The first agent's eyes (the one from the front's body) follows the flying (rotating) flat wrench.

19. The second agent reacts - his eyelid moves down and up in slow movement. The end of slowing effect - the first agent ends the slide and the second agent is hit on the head by flat wrench - <groan of pain> (the head cut at the point of impact - blood); the flat wrench falls (with metallic sound) to the ground (bouncing off the agent's head), then the agent falls and hit (falls on his face with momentum - he was running) without groan (he's dead).

20. The first agent looks at it in shock (he doesn't even flinch) and says to himself (shocked): "Motherfucker...". After a short while, the agent squint one's eyes and turns (all body) to Mr. Mate. The camera moves slightly to the left. Mr. Mate looks warm up (he has beads of sweat on his forehead) - he have a serious expression on his face. He holds the French key in his hand and says (indifferently): "I can do this all day...". The agent doesn't answer anything.

21. Suddenly he starts running towards Mr. Mate who does the same. When they are close - the agent raises the baton (for swing - from upper), and Mr. Mate turns the French key in his hand (for blocking the stroke). They both start to slide - the agent hits (leans forward) and Mr. Mate is blocking (leans back). They wrestle for a while. Mr. Mate uses his other hand (second hand on French key) to push the agent. Agent lowers the baton as he takes a step back - straightens up when he regains his balance.

22. Then Mr. Mate takes a swing - from upper (turns the French key in his hand) when leans back. Next he takes a step forward when make a swing. Agent leans back - when making a next step back and blocking the attack. They're wrestling again. The agent does not remain in debt. This time it's the agent (helping himself with the other hand) who pushes Mr. Mate. He slide backwards but doesn't lose balance (straightens up quickly). The agent takes a step forward, picking up the baton to hit.

23. At the same moment Mr. Mate leans back and picking up the French key (he's sweaty forehead). Both simultaneously swing - from upper. Their weapons collide in the air. They were wrestling when suddenly Mr. Mate stabs the agent in the wrist with his other hand (with a knife, which he pulled out very quickly from pocket). Agent <a moan of pain>, drops the baton and grabs himself by wrist (with her other hand) as he curses (painfully): "Fuck!".

24. The agent takes a step back (he's slightly tilted forward). Mr. Mate quickly retracts the knife and grabs the French key with both hands. It hits the agent without thinking - swing (from lower). Agent <groans of pain>, flies backwards (blood from mouth). Camera follows him. Mr. Mate throws the French key on the ground and disappears behind the left edge of the screen. In the place where the agent falls (inertly), another 3 agents are already running.

25. Two on the line below (one behind the other) and the third slightly above. The camera focuses on them. Suddenly, a motorcycle wheel flies from the left side. The first agent (below) is crouching when sliding, bending down at the same time. The next agent (running after the first) gets hit in the face <pain groan> and falls backwards (blood from the mouth) onto the back <pain groan>. The wheel bounces off the agent to the left, hits the ground and jumps towards the viewer and to the left (diagonally).

26. The first agent yells (exasperated): "One stubborn son of a bitch!". The next wheel flies a bit above, the agent on the line of this object is covering itself (with his hand and a baton) and he's sliding. Tilts back on impact. The wheel bounces and flies left, bouncing off the ground, and then rolls left. The agent runs to the large chest (by the wall) and hides behind it (crouches). The third wheel flies and bounces off a small crate (stands in front of the big ones) and bounces to the right.

27. The first agent lays down on the ground and covers his head with his hands (along with the baton). The previously hit agent rises on his elbows, but the fourth wheel flies and hits him again in the face <groan of pain> and blood from his mouth. The agent drops to the ground, dead. Camera moves to the left (no longer showing agents). Mr. Mate stands with his arms raised holding the wheel (his mouth is open and he has a lot of sweat on his forehead, his eyes are wide open).

28. He throws the wheel forward (there are no more wheels on the rack-wardrobe). Then he breathes soundlessly with his mouth open (his upper body rises with each breath). After a while, Mr. Mate calms down and his gaze becomes indifferent again. Then he unexpectedly turns and runs to the motorcycle. He's behind the viewer (facing the motorcycle). He starts the engine and says (ironically): "Wanna go for a little ride?". Then he quickly kicks the motorcycle's footrest and turn body to the right.

29. Turn the handle of the motorcycle (with appropriate force). The motorcycle starts to move fast forward and the camera moves with it. The first agent picks up from the ground and looks straight ahead (unfortunately too late). He makes a shocked face. A fraction of a second later, he crashes into the "hood" of the motorcycle with <groan of pain>, which, together with the agent, rides to the right (disappears behind the right edge of the screen).

30. The second agent (hidden behind the crate) watches it in shock. After a while, you hear the motorcycle hitting the wall and <scream of pain>. The agent gets up (the one behind the crate), turns body left, he squint one's eyes and runs to the left. The camera moves with him. After a while you can also see Mr. Mate (runs from behind the left edge of the screen). He has the knife in one hand and the key to the wheels (jack) in the other. When they are close - the agent raises the baton up (want to - swing from upper).

31. They both slide towards each other. Mr. Mate leans back when he blocks the agent's attack (he lifts and turns the jack in his hand). They wrestle for a while. Then Mr. Mate gently pushes (with one hand) the agent, who takes a step back. A second later, Mr. Mate takes a step forward and makes a swing (from lower) with the other hand (the one with the knife). The agent dodges (leans back - head as well). They both straighten up.

32. Mr. Mate raises his hand with the jack (want to - swing from upper) and the agent prepares to thrust. Mr. Mate begins to attack (he starts to swing), and the agent thrust him with a baton in the belly. Mr. Mate lets out a <groan of pain> as he bends at the waist taking two steps back. The agent straightens up (relaxes) and jokes (maliciously): "Need a breather?". After a while, Mr. Mate straightens up when he squint one's eyes.

33. Unexpectedly - in a split second Mr. Mate lunges at the unsuspecting agent (knocks him over). After they fall - Mr. Mate stabs him in the head. The agent didn't even have time to react. Mr. Mate to himself (darkly): "Asking for me, or for you?". Mr. Mate breathes with his mouth open (his torso rises). Mr. Mate straightens up and stares straight ahead, his expression changing to indifferent. The camera moves to the right. Two agents are running to Mr. Mate.

34. Mr. Mate quickly gets up (pulls out the knife - blood) and takes three steps up and left (diagonally). Mr. Mate calmly waits for a moment for the first of them to get close, then takes a swing and throws Jack at the agent's head with all his strength. The jack bounces off the agent and falls to the ground with a metallic sound. The agent make <groan of pain> and falls on his face with the force of momentum (he was running) with a cut on his head (temporarily unconscious).

35. Another agent is close, he prepare to a swing (from upper) and then he a slide and tries to hit Mr. Mate. However, Mr. Mate jumps back and the agent only hits the "air". Agent swears (frustrated): "Crap!". Mr. Mate slide as he squats on knee and then throws a knife at the agent's head. The agent falls with the momentum dead on the ground (knife in his head). After a moment the camera moves to the right (Mr. Mate disappears behind the left edge of the screen).

36. The camera zooms in on the previous agent who starts to rise from the ground. He says to himself (painfully): "My head..." when slowly begins to rise. Mr. Mate comes up (you can see his legs - the camera only shows that). Then (after a while) the camera moves higher (no longer shows the agent) - you can see Mr. Mate, who is looking (down) at the agent - squint one's eyes. He then raises his leg and crushes the agent's head - all you can see is blood (like the God-DL Zombie finish) and the poignant sound of crushed skull.

37. Mr. Mate looks ahead (his face changes to indifferent) and says to himself (indifferent and tired): "Who's next?". The camera moves slightly to the right. Two agents run up and stop nearby, one a little higher and the other a little lower. They both look at the massacred agent (his head). The first agent squint one's eyes, and the second one looked shocked and shouted (agitated): "You're one sick animal!". Mr. Mate shrugs and says (indifferent): "If I had a nickel every time I heard that...".

38. Then Mr. Mate makes a serious face, and so do both agents. The agents takes out a telescopic baton and unfolds it with a sharp, effective swinger of his hand. Mr. Mate and the agents run towards each other. The agent (below) runs to Mr. Mate (he runs to matches the line of Mr. Mate). The camera narrows (focuses) on them (the next agent is not visible). The agent prepares to swing (from upper), and then the agent and Mr. Mate slide towards (together).

39. The agent then attacks and Mr. Mate blocks (uses his forearm). They wrestle for a while, then Mr. Mate also uses his other hand - with both hands he grabs the agent by the shoulders while moving closer to him. Then Mr. Mate turns and pulls the agent's arms down while sliding his feet between the agent's feet. Then Mr. Mate leans over and throws agent. The agent is shocked from the very beginning (of this throw - agent did not expect this situation).

40. The agent lands with <groan of pain> on the ground. Mr. Mate quickly turns right body because the second agent is running up (he's close). The camera moves to the right - it shows the agent on the right (the agent on the left disappears from view). Mr. Mate has a serious expression and a profuse sweat on his face. The agent prepares to swing (from upper) and when he's close to opponent, them Mr. Mate takes a step forward - he comes closer to the agent (very close).

41. Next Mr. Mate grabs him by the forearm (blocks his attack), then punches him in the face (uses second hand). The agent is shocked (not expecting this), leans back when he makes <moan of pain> (blood from the agent's mouth). The agent takes two steps back as he tries to regain his balance. Mr. Mate lowers his arms as he’s <breathing heavily> (his upper body rises with each breath). He stares ahead blankly. The camera moves a little to the left (shows the agent on the left and hides the agent on the right).

42. The agent runs to Mr. Mate, whose expression changes to neutral. Mr. Mate turns left body as the agent does a slide and hits Mr. Mate in the belly (thrust with baton). Mr. Mate makes a <groan of pain> and staggers back, leaning forward (takes three steps back). The camera follows to the right along with Mr. Mate. You can see the other agent going to Mr. Mate and he hides the baton (he has both hands free). Agent (from behind) grabs Mr. Mate (Full Nelson) and says (pleased): "Gotcha!".

43. The camera brings them closer. Mr. Mate is surprised for a moment, then tries to struggle with an angry face (shows his teeth) for a moment. Next Mr. Mate calms down. From the left side comes a second agent, Mr. Mate looks at him and squint one's eyes. The agent stops close to Mr. Mate, smirks (spitefully) and says (greedily): "I've been waiting for this...". The agent then - swing (from lower) and hits Mr. Mate in the face. Mr. Mate makes a <moan of pain>, blood spurts from his mouth and his head pops up and then falls down.

44. From the mouth of Mr. Mate is dripping blood. Mr. Mate passes through without emotion and looks at the agent, squint one's eyes and says (darkly): "I'll be back...". The agent looks at him and says (indifferently): "I don't think so...". The agent then hits Mr. Mate with a thrust to the head (thrust with a baton). Mr. Mate head jumps up then down (inertly) - Mr. Mate passes out. After a while, the agents smile maliciously, and their eyes turn red (also glow red).

<TO BE CONTINUED>


Light effect:

Yellow (morning).


Dialogues:

Mr. Mate: "Targets neutralized"
Havoc: "Outstanding job, agent!"
Mr. Mate: "Easy money!"
Havoc: That was your last mission..."
Mr. Mate: "What do you mean 'that was the last mission?'"
Havoc: "You're fired!"
Mr. Mate: "What?!"
Mr. Mate: "Very well..."
Mr. Mate: "We shall meet again soon"
Mr. Mate: "You will regret this decision..."
Mr. Mate: <sighs>
Mr. Mate: "Y'all think you could sneak up on me?"
Mr. Mate: <bone crunch>
Mr. Mate: "Just in time, I was just about to make dinner, y'all want some?"
Agent: "We've always hated you, Mate. It's a pity we have orders not to kill you"
Mr. Mate: "'Ordered not to?' Don't you mean 'unable to?'"
Agent: "Don't get ahead of yourself Mate, hands up!"
Mr. Mate: "Yep... Business as usual..."
Agent: <groan of fall>
Agent: "You asshole!"
Agent: <gurgling sounds>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Shiiit!"
Agent: "Come back here!"
Agent: "Woah?!"
Agent: <hiss of pain>
Agent: "Damn..."
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Motherfucker..."
Mr. Mate: "I can do this all day..."
Agent: <a moan of pain>
Agent: "Fuck!"
Agent: <groans of pain>
Agent: <pain groan>
Agent: <pain groan>
Agent: "One stubborn son of a bitch!"
Agent: <groan of pain>
Mr. Mate: "Wanna go for a little ride?"
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <scream of pain>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Need a breather?"
Mr. Mate: "Asking for me, or for you?"
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Crap!"
Agent: "My head..."
Mr. Mate: "Who's next?"
Agent: "You're one sick animal!"
Mr. Mate: "If I had a nickel every time I heard that..."
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <moan of pain>
Mr. Mate: <breathing heavily>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Gotcha!"
Agent: "I've been waiting for this..."
Mr. Mate: <moan of pain>
Mr. Mate: "I'll be back..."
Agent: "I don't think so..."

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Comments

Greeeaat! Thanks for letting people know that you're gonna work on facial hair. Also, I am very happy to be first candidate to this experiment! ^-^

Just in case, if anyone doesn't know, I am "Matt" character, not to confuse with Mr. Mate.

I'm going to be make stubble, but I don't know when yet... Hard to say, probably in the right order.

Cool, there are intelligent people here and they won't be wrong. :P

Nice!

Thanks!

@Colizza, sorry... I accidentally deleted your comment...

Answering - we will see what beard may fit which character, it may turn out that e.g. for a specific character no beard will match.

Hey guys! Been very happy to see how acclaimed the latest film has been. Here's to some more 4+ star parts to Reduce ;D

I will hopefully be able to get onto my thoughts about this scene on Friday - might be further into the weekend, just letting y'all know I'm looking at it now.

Also you may notice that I just changed my username here on NG - I've been asking to be referred to as "AzureDragoonGX" for a while now, since I rebranded during my primetime on NG to now, but I only realized you could only change usernames as a Supporter. Thanks to Mejson for my 2nd Supporter status, and now permitting me to change it after I realized it too late the 1st time. ^^

Yeah, the "newest" movie was surprisingly well received XD I was surprised too :P A bit strange that now such an assessment, and before that, well...

For sure :) Cool, we will wait for this :P

Yes, I noticed it right away :) Yes, a premium account makes it possible. It's nice that you made it. Well, you know I'm watching over you man. :P

Awesome mate, Loving the story thus far, though here is my proposal of changes for this scene:

Mr. Mate: "Targets neutralized"
Mr. Mate: "Easy money!"
Mr. Mate: "What do you mean, last mission?"
Mr. Mate: "What?!"

Mr. Mate: "Well... you will regret this decision..." ==> "Very well..." <angrily> (I think saying "you will regret this decision" on the phone is not appropriate for me)

Note, I think it would be better for Mr. Mate to hang up his phone before threatening whoever is on the phone. So the description would be:

'''
regaining his balance quickly (indifferently): "Very well...". Mr. Mate then hangs up the phone without waiting for a response.

5. Mr. Mate squeezes his phone, squints one's eyes, and says (darkly):
'''
(I think it does not make sense for Mr. Mate to be threatening his boss directly, he is sneaky and does not want any attention remember? He's my character so yeah :))

Mr. Mate: "I will be back soon..." ==> "We shall meet again soon"
Mr. Mate: "I will emerge from the shadows... behind your back..." ==> "You will regret this decision..." (I think this dialogue fits my character)

Mr. Mate: <sighs>

Mr. Mate: "Did y'all really think you could sneak up on me?" ==> "Y'all think you could sneak up on me?"

Mr. Mate: <bone crunch>

Mr. Mate: "Just right I have time, I'll be happy to tear myself apart... actually, I'll tear you apart..." ==> "Just in time, I was just about to make dinner, y'all want some?" (sarcastically of course)

Agent: "We've always hated you... what a pity we have an order to not kill you" ==> "Ha ha <sarcastically>, We've always hated you Mate... It's a pity that our orders are not to kill you"
Mr. Mate: "You aren't allowed or just can't?" ==> "Really? you're not allowed to? Or you just can't?
Agent: "You will regret it!" ==> "Don't get ahead of yourself Mate, hands up!"
Mr. Mate: "Yeah, I've heard that before..." ==> "Yep... Business as usual..."

Agent: <groan of fall>
Agent: "You asshole!"
Agent: <gurgling sounds>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Shiiit!"

Agent: "Where are you going?!" ==> "Come back here!"

Agent: "Woah?!"
Agent: <hiss of pain>
Agent: "Damn..."
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Motherfucker..."
Mr. Mate: "I can do this all day..."
Agent: <a moan of pain>
Agent: "Fuck!"
Agent: <groans of pain>
Agent: <pain groan>
Agent: <pain groan>
Agent: "One stubborn son of a bitch!"
Agent: <groan of pain>

Mr. Mate: "What do you say for a little ride?" ==> "Wanna go for a little ride?"

Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <scream of pain>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>

Agent: "Already tired?" ==> "Tired? Need some water?"
Mr. Mate: "Not even close..." ==> "No thank you..."

Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Crap!"
Agent: "My head..."

Mr. Mate: "There you go again..." ==> "Anyone else?"
Agent: "You monster!" ==> "You're one sick animal!"

Mr. Mate: "Yeah, whatever they call it..."
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <moan of pain>
Mr. Mate: <breathing heavily>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Gotcha!"
Agent: "I've been waiting for this..."
Mr. Mate: <moan of pain>
Mr. Mate: "I'll be back..."
Agent: "I don't think so..."

Thanks, since you think such a change (with a phone call) is your decision. I added to the sheet. I'm waiting for @AzureDragoonGX

Hey guys! Found the time. ;)

Regarding the threats on the phone call, I would by default leave them for only Mr. Mate to hear, but that's because we are only hearing half the conversation. If we knew that Mr. Mate's client was dripping with venom in what he's saying to Mr. Mate, then it would make sense that Mr. Mate was not going to hide any sense what he's going to do next to him. But since the viewer won't know this right away due to how the scene is presented, it's better to leave it out.

As for the fight scene, it's pretty good. Don't really have too much more to say about it, so I'll go right for the dialogues:

Mr. Mate: "Targets neutralized"
Mr. Mate: "Easy money!"

Mr. Mate: "What do you mean, last mission?" -> "What do you mean 'that was the last mission?'"

Mr. Mate: "What?!"

Mr. Mate: "Well... you will regret this decision..." -> "Ugh... Fine."

Mr. Mate: "I will be back soon..." -> "This isn't over."

Mr. Mate: "I will emerge from the shadows... behind your back..." -> "He's going to know what his enemies felt soon..."

Mr. Mate: <sighs>

Mr. Mate: "Did y'all really think you could sneak up on me?" -> "Did y'all think you could sneak up on me?"

Mr. Mate: <bone crunch>

Mr. Mate: "Just right I have time, I'll be happy to tear myself apart... actually, I'll tear you apart..." -> "Right on time. Shall I put on some cool jazz for our dance?" (Chord's dinner line works really well too.)

Agent: "We've always hated you... what a pity we have an order to not kill you" -> "We've always hated you, Mate. It's a pity we have orders not to kill you."

Mr. Mate: "You aren't allowed or just can't?" -> "'Ordered not to?' Don't you mean 'unable to?'"

Agent: "You will regret it!" -> "Don't get ahead of yourself!"

Mr. Mate: "Yeah, I've heard that before..." -> "Don't lose your head!"

Agent: <groan of fall>
Agent: "You asshole!"
Agent: <gurgling sounds>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Shiiit!"

Agent: "Where are you going?!" -> "Get back over here!"

Agent: "Woah?!"
Agent: <hiss of pain>
Agent: "Damn..."
Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Motherfucker..."
Mr. Mate: "I can do this all day..."
Agent: <a moan of pain>
Agent: "Fuck!"
Agent: <groans of pain>
Agent: <pain groan>
Agent: <pain groan>

Agent: "One stubborn son of a bitch!" -> "You stubborn son of a bitch!"

Agent: <groan of pain>

Mr. Mate: "What do you say for a little ride?" -> "Would you like a quick joyride?" (Chord's line works too)

Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <scream of pain>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>

Agent: "Already tired?" -> "Need a breather?"

Mr. Mate: "Not even close..." -> "Asking for me, or for you?"

Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Crap!"
Agent: "My head..."

Mr. Mate: "There you go again..." -> "Who's next?"

Agent: "You monster!" -> "You're a goddamn monster!"

Mr. Mate: "Yeah, whatever they call it..." -> "If I had a nickel every time I heard that..."

Agent: <groan of pain>
Agent: <moan of pain>
Mr. Mate: <breathing heavily>
Mr. Mate: <groan of pain>
Agent: "Gotcha!"

Agent: "I've been waiting for this..." -> "I've been looking forward to this."

Mr. Mate: <moan of pain>

Mr. Mate: "I'll be back..."

Agent: "I don't think so..." -> "Good - Means I can beat the shit out of you again."

Thank you very much for your comment and great dialogues! Well, I did a questionnaire and so far the @ChordC idea "wins". It seems that more votes will be for his idea. :P

Nice that you joined Discord. :D

PS. Also for Havoc we will add text and voice.

Corrected scene - according to the guidelines.
Added in point 4 - simple texts for Havoc.
I'm closing the scene!

Bit late here as usual, but it looks good to me! The prospect of facial hair seems intriguing, and more realistic. :) Nice to see @MATRVG as test subject number one for such a feature. :D

Lots of action in this scene, exciting progression. Seemed a little unexpected he gets fired just like that in the beginning - after what seems like a job well done, but I guess more will be explained on this later. The glowing red eyes... almost makes it seem like it's all a dream... intriguing to see what's next!