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Reduce 3 - Scene 16 (Planning)

Posted by Mejson - August 2nd, 2022


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Welcome everyone!


First thing:

I wonder how Cyberdevil's vacation was / is. He's gone for a whole (literal) month. I hope he was able to rest. He will be back in 5 days and will be catching up. Why am I mentioning this? Because I'm also going to be away for a week with my family next week, so I probably won't be at NG for a week. How about your vacation? Have you been where? Have you rested?


Main thing:

And now finally another scene - Scene 16! A very emotional scene as it contains everything - anger, violence, humor, sarcasm... and of course the plot. As the title suggests - The Return of the King, yes, your beloved Mejson is back! (maybe apart from MariogD - he would gladly kill my character XD - "Too much Mejon!"). I wonder how you like this scene? It will be great for sure. See you in the future!


Extra thing:

Thanks @ChordC for adding me to your epic songs as Inspiration! I don't know the reasons for your decision, but I feel honored anyway. Here are the great work of the best musical artist: https://chordc.newgrounds.com/audio. Hands up! Make some noise!!! (I still have this after "Męskie Granie Orkiestra 2022" concert I was XD).


What do you think about it, @Cyberdevil@Azure@ChordC@MariogD@SayMeBott@Colizza@XavierDalton@MATRVG?


Regards,

Mejson


Scene 16 - Return of the King

Inscription (on black background):

Episode 16
Day 45
(~1 day later)
11:57 AM


Action:

1. The scene starts at a familiar location (again). Under a dome made of plant pot leaves, there are primitive beds (exactly 4) and primitive rescue equipment. Two beds are closer to the viewer, and two are further away. On the one closer - on the left is Mejson, and on the other - on the right - Bill. However, from the very beginning, the camera shows Mejson.

2. From right to left (slowly). Suddenly Mejson's eyelid twitches and his body has cramps involuntarily (starts to wake up). After a short while the camera zooms in on Mejson's face - the entrance to Mejson's mind. Mejson (in his mind) lies (side) on the black plane of void, his eyelid twitches.

3. The camera zooms in on Mejson's face. Suddenly, Steve's face appears (side) above his face (close, transparency). Steve looks at him sarcastically and then says (ironically): "Rise and shine, my sleeping prince". Then Mejson opens his eyes, he has a tired face. Steve disappears (up, transparency).

4. Mejson rises on his elbows and pulls his legs up (to a sitting position). Mejson leans forward. Steve (side) appears behind him and says (ironically): "Slept well?". Mejson looks at Steve (with his eye alone) and squints one's eyes, but says nothing. Steve disappears. After a moment, Mejson looks straight ahead, then slowly stands up.

5. The camera is still focused on Mejson's face. Then he looks straight ahead with a worried expression on her face. Steve appears behind him (front) with a worried face and asks (worried): "Don't worry, we only lost because he cheated". Without looking away, Mejson says (seriously): "Can we ever make it back home?".

6. Steve changes his expression to surprise and says nothing from the moment. And after a while, Steve grows curious, adds (curious): "Why are you asking that now?". Mejson (without turning around) replies (seriously): "I’m not sure...". Mejson turns (front) his back to Steve. Steve disappears, Mejson looks around the ground (looks down) sad.

7. Steve appears on the left (side) and says a trivial line (reassuring): "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger". Mejson makes a serious face, looks at Steve and asks (seriously): "Steve... you're not really here, are you?". Steve makes a serious face (he squints one's eyes) and doesn't say anything.

8. Mejson looks at the ground again indifferently. Steve regains his balance, smiles wickedly at Mejson (confident) and says (confident): "But I can be whoever you want!". Then Steve disappears. Mejson looks to the left with curiously. On the right, 'Delsin' (side) appears, puts his hand on Mejson's shoulder and says (calmly): "It'll be okay, Mr. Mejson".

9. Mejson looks (at him) to the right in surprise. 'Delsin' disappears. On the left side, 'Mr. Mate' (side) appears with his arms crossed and says (sternly): "Get a grip!". And then he adds (firmly): "Don't forget! You are leader!". 'Mr. Mate' disappears. Mejson watched him with squints one's eyes. On the right side appears 'MariogD' (side), raises his bow proudly.

10. Next says (proudly): "You have my bow!". Mejson looks to the right in disgust (raises one eyebrow and lowers the other) and says (disgusted): "At this point, I'd prefer Steve". 'MariogD' lowers his bow, squints one's eyes and says (disappointed): "Asshole...". Then 'MariogD' disappears. Steve (side) appears on the left and says (ironic and spiteful): "It could be much worse…".

11. Mejson looks at him indifferently and says (indifferently): "Right... I've seen enough". Mejson closes his eyes, the camera zooms in on his head - the exit from Mejson's head. The camera shows Mejson lying, his eyes open. After a while, he slowly rises from <moan of pain> to a sitting position, then turns forward and sits down on the bed.

12. He looks down at his body with a gruff expression on his face and says loudly (grumblingly): "Fuck! Everything hurts!". And he adds to himself (indifferently): "I'm too old for this shit...". Then he slowly gets up <with a groan> and circles the bed - heading for the exit. When he is already at the exit level (in one line to the exit).

13. Then suddenly Mr. Mate enters the Dome. Mr. Mate stops in front of Mejson and says (cheerfully): "I never thought I would miss your grumpy voice!". Mr. Mate has a happy expression on his face. Mejson still has a grouchy expression on his face. Mr. Mate is <croaking> (seeing that it did not amuse Mejson).

14. Next says again (optimistically): "Glad to see you back on your feet, old man!". Mejson brightens up a little and says (indifferently): "Thanks man, I appreciate it". After a while, Mejson is getting serious and asks (seriously): "What did I miss?". Mr. Mate also grows serious and replies (seriously): "You have to hear this...".

15. After a while the camera moves to the left and stops… again... at the same stone as in the previous scene is sit Bott*. 'Shevy' is in his arms. In front of him is standing Candy with a training stick (without sharp ends). MariogD (without his equipment) is standing a short distance in front of Candy. MariogD is propped up with a training stick.

16. He has an indifferent expression on face, while Candy is scratching his head - he looks like he doesn't know what's going on. MariogD asks Bott* (indifferently): "Are you serious?". And after a while he adds (firmly): "He has no idea what he's doing!". Bott* replies (calmly): "Give us a moment".

17. Then Bott* grows serious, leans forward a little and says (firmly): "Candy... bad guys...". Candy flinches at these words, and his pupils narrow. Then Candy puts both hands to his head (covering the top of his face). MariogD looks at Candy anxiously, then takes a combative stance - grabs the spear with both hands.

18. And next MariogD says (concerned): "What's going on?!". Candy begins to tremble slightly all over his body, grits his teeth and makes a <strange long hiss>. The camera zooms in on Candy - starting at the bottom and then moving up. The camera stops on Candy's head, then the camera suddenly zooms out.

19. Candy quickly straightens his arms and leans forward a little. His expression has changed drastically - his eyebrows are flat, his pupils are narrowed, and his teeth are a bit clenched. MariogD takes a step backwards hesitantly because he's scared for a moment and says (scared): "Woah!". And then his expression grows serious and focused.

20. Next he takes a focused stance (slightly inclined, holding a stick in one hand), and says (firmly): "Come at me, bro!". Candy squints one's eyes and starts running (sharply) towards MariogD. The camera focuses on both characters. When Candy is close, he slides a little and attacks with a stick - swing - upper (one hand - weak).

21. MariogD leans back a little and defends with a stick - block (one hand - weak block). After a short while, Candy attacks again and attacks with a stick - swing - upper (two hand - strong). MariogD takes a step back, grabs the stick with both hands and defends with stick - block (two hand - strong block).

22. Candy grits his teeth in anger, and MariogD looks surprised (for a moment). They wrestle for a while. Suddenly, MariogD makes a malicious face (confident) and pushes Candy away with confidence. Candy loses his balance (makes a surprised face) as he leans back and takes a step back. MariogD takes the opportunity.

23. He takes a step forward and attacks with a stick - thrust - lower (in Candy's belly). Candy leans significantly forward with <wild animal pain> and takes three steps back. However, his wild eagerness does not weaken, and after a while he runs up, makes a short slide and attacks with a stick - swing - upper (two hand - strong).

24. MariogD looks surprised (his pupils narrow for a moment), he says to himself (surprised): "...the fuck?!". MariogD does dodge - jamp back (dodges the attack - Candy's stick hits the ground). MariogD's face is focused again. Candy and MariogD raise their sticks, take a step towards each other, and both attack with a stick - swing - upper (one hand - weak).

25. Candy takes a step forward (relentlessly) and attacks with a stick - swing - upper (two hand - strong) while gritting his teeth. MariogD takes a step back and blocks with a stick - block (two hand - strong block) without losing focus. They wrestle for a while. MariogD smiles confidently and attacks with a stick - thrust - lower (on Candy's foot).

26. Probably MariogD saw this blow during the match - Mejson vs Keni. Candy lets out <wild animal hiss pain> and jumps back 3 times on a healthy leg. Then Candy stands on both legs, shaking angrily with her teeth tightly clenched, leaning back a little. MariogD straightens up and says (curiously): "What's the matter?".

27. And then he adds (maliciously): "Tired already?". You can already see drops of sweat on both faces of the characters. However, MariogD's joy did not last long. After a while, Candy runs towards MariogD and attacks with a stick - thrust - upper (one hand - to MariogD’s face). MariogD gets serious and focused quickly, and at the right moment he does dodge - tilt back.

28. MariogD's eyes narrow for a moment when he avoids getting hit. Wasting no time, Candy attacks again with a stick - swing - upper (two hand - strong). MariogD does dodge - jamp back (dodges the attack - Candy's stick hits the ground). MariogD looks at the ground for a moment, surprised, then angrily at Candy, gritting his teeth a little (for a moment).

29. Both - practically simultaneously move at each other and collide with training sticks. They wrestle for a moment - both show clenched teeth. Unexpectedly, Candy leans back and hits MariogD with his head (in the face of MariogD). Probably Candy saw the duel - Steve vs Mejson (some time ago) and unknowingly used this attack.

30. MariogD with <groan of pain> slides backwards (because of impact). However, he does not fall, because he uses a stick to support himself (it breaks the impact), but only crouches on one knee during this slide. Moments later, Candy attacks again (with fury in his eyes) with a stick - swing - upper (two hand - strong).

31. MariogD blocks at the last moment with a stick - block (two hand - strong block) with horror in his eyes. However, Candy hits MariogD in the hand (the one held by the stick). MariogD drops the training stick, makes <groan of pain> and grasps his injured hand. Then he yells with his eyes closed (painfully): "Motherfucker!".

32. Candy lifts the stick (with furiously in his eyes) to deliver the final punch, but luckily at this point you hear an off-screen Bott* scream (firmly): "Enough! You got them!". And then adds (reassuringly): "It's safe now...". Candy calms down, drops a stick and closes his eyes. And his eyebrows return to their original spherical shape.

33. Candy is "normal" again - his pupils are back to normal. Candy grabs his head and crouches - shaking. Then the camera zooms out. Bott* runs up to MariogD and stops between Candy and MariogD (a little above). Bott* puts his hand to his chin when he says to MariogD (excited): "Ouch! We need a medic!".

34. MariogD looks at him angry and says (furious): "You're the medic, jackass!". Bott*'s eyes narrow and he says (crazy): "Right... we're doing an amputation!". MariogD squints one's eyes and replies (angry): "Are you out of your fucking mind?!". Bott* calms down, lowers his hand, looks down at the ground sadly and says (sadly): "I've never done an amputation...".

35. MariogD calms down a bit and slowly stands up (he still holding his own hand), then asks Bott* (intrigued and agitated): "What have you done to him?". Suddenly you hear an off-screen Mejson say (firmly): "Exactly!". The camera moves a bit to the right - Mejson comes in and says (firmly): "What have you done with my kid?!"

36. Bott* and MariogD look at Mejson in surprise (MariogD turns to the whole body to right). Mejson is followed by Mr. Mate, who approaches the stone (to the right of the heroes) and sits on it. Mr. Mate has a stern expression on his face (he's waiting for the situation to develop). Mejson makes an angry face.

37. Mejson stops between Bott* and MariogD (facing the front - a bit higher). He is looking at Bott* says (sarcastically and maliciously angry): "'...tell everyone what happened to Candy!'". Bott* looks at Mejson with gentle eyes (he has raised eyebrows - although viewer doesn't see it because Bott* turns his head to Mejson), however Bott* doesn't feel guilty.

38. Bott* says (calmly): "I helped Candy unlock his potential by…". Mejson shudders furiously at these words and says (furiously): "...by brainwashing him?!". Bott* makes a intrested face, looks at Mejson and says (intrested): "You wanted to toughen him up, right?". And then he shudders, looks up (crazy) at Mejson.

39. And Bott* says (crazy): "We're making great progress!". Mejson almost screams (firmly): "That's enough!". Next Mejson walks fast over to Bott* (he stops literally in front of him). Then he says (firmly): "It ends now, do you understand?!". Bott* looks away (looks straight ahead) - doesn't looks Mejson's eyes.

40. Bott* has half open eyes and says (indifferently): "Sure..." (not honest). Mejson squints one's eyes (he’s not convinced by Bott's answer) and screams (strongly): "Do you understand?!". Bott* looks Mejson in the eyes - still indifferent and says (ironically): "Sir, yes sir!". Then Mejson closes his eyes, <sighs deeply> (his body moves up, then down).

41. Next Mejson looks at Candy (changes head to front) and adds to himself (gently): "I wanted to get through to him calmly...". The camera moves to Candy. Suddenly Candy gets up (as if nothing) and goes to the left (the camera was not showing Candy during the conversation). Mejson turns to MariogD (camera focuses on them).

42. MariogD - who has been watching the entire conversation in silence, and says (calmly but a bit indifferently): "Why are you standing here? Treat the wounds" . MariogD without a word turns and goes to the right. Camera zoom out. Bott* took the opportunity when Mejson spoke to MariogD and followed Candy (moves to left).

43. Mejson turns left - he notices Bott* is moving away and says (firmly): "I'm not done with you yet!". Camera focuses on Mejson. Then he leans slightly, closes his eyes, puts his hand to his face and says to himself (tired): "What did I do to deserve this?". After a while, Mejson straightens up, lowers his hand, opens his eyes - he has a tired expression.

44. Mejson eyelids are half closed). Then he turns to the right, shudders (scared): "Aghhh!". In the same moment the camera shifts a bit to the left just as rapidly. Mr. Mate stands in front of Mejson. Mejson leans down again, closes his eyes and puts his hand to his head and says (firmly): "Mate, you gotta stop doing that!".

45. Mr. Mate scratches his head with an indifferent face and shrugs his shoulders. Mejson continues as if to himself under his breath (annoyed): "One day I'll get a heart attack because of you guys!". Next Mr. Mate looks at Mejson expectantly. After a while, Mejson straightens up, (he looks tired) looks at Mr. Mate and says (calmly): "Go help MariogD".

46. Mr. Mate makes a shocked face for a second, then an indifferent face and says (ironically): "Sir, yes sir!". Mejson interrupts him and says (firmly): "Very funny… go! Don't make me angry". Mr. Mate turns and goes to the right. After a while, the camera zooms in - on Mejson.

47. Next Mejson squints one's eyes and says to himself quieter (seriously): "I have one more moron to talk to…". The camera moves to the right. The camera first passes Mr. Mate, and then (after a while) MariogD and Delsin - the heroes pass each other (MariogD goes to the right (lower), and Delsin to the left (a little higher)).

48. MariogD is still holding his injured hand - on which he already has a visible bruise, just like on his forehead. Delsin turns to MariogD and says (joyful): "I heard Mejson has just woken up!". MariogD has a stern expression (eyelids half lowered) and says, without looking at Delsin (roughly): "Good luck, my friend...".

49. Delsin looks surprised for a moment, then stares straight ahead (without stopping). For a few seconds, the camera shows Delsin walking further to the left, his expression returning to normal. Suddenly the camera zooms out a little. Mr. Mate (goes right). When they're closer, Deslin squints one's eyes, and Mr. Mate turns his head towards him.

50. Mr. Mate says (ironically): "Like I said, we're in this shit together". Delsin's face changes to uncertain (he raises one eyebrow and the other lowers the other) - he's still watching Mr. Mate (also after passing each other). Mr. Mate, after saying his words, looks ahead and smirks at himself maliciously (Delsin does not see it).

51. After a while, the camera focuses on Delsin again - he stares straight ahead with a blank expression on his face. After a few moments the camera zooms out again - Mejson is coming from the left side. Delsin smiles, and Mejson has a grumbling expression on his face. Delsin is the first to speak (happily): "Mr. Mejson, nice to have you back!".

52. Mejson's face does not change and he replies (indifferently): "Well yes, I’m back. Indeed". And then Mejson continues (ironically): "So you became a 'leader' in my absence?". Delsin makes a serious face (raises his eyebrows). Delsin looks down at the ground and says (intimidated and slower): "Well... your brother didn't want to, so… yeah".

53. Then Mejson squints one's eyes and says (suspiciously): "I see… And how did you do? Any problems?". Delsin looks intently into Mejson's eyes and replies (focused): "Well, there were no attacks, and the team's holding up". Suddenly, Mejson shudders furiously, his face looking very angry and says (furiously): "Bullshit! Bott* was drugging Candy right under your nose!".

54. And Mejson continues with screams (strongly): "And you did jack shit! Why?!". Delsin shudders in surprise, his pupils narrow in his eyes, he opens his mouth but says nothing. Mejson again screams (strongly): "You're surprised? True leaders know everything around them!".

55. And after the pause Mejson continues to scream (strongly): "Why did you ignore the warnings?!". Delsin looks down at the ground, closes his eyes halfway, and says (reluctantly): "This killer... can't be trusted". Mejson shudders again and screams (strongly): "Really?! You’ve allowed your personal beliefs to obstruct your judgment?!".

56. Then Mejson clenches his teeth, shaking with anger, then closes eyes and <takes a deep breath> - he calms down. Delsin looks at Mejson sadly. Mejson opens his eyes (he's a bit calmer) but still angry and says (disappointed): "You disappointed me...". Delsin opens his mouth (wants to say something), but Mejson interrupts him (firmly): "I don't want to hear any excuses!".

57. Delsin looks down at the ground again. After a moment the camera moves to the right. The camera stops at the Dome. In the middle are standing - MariogD (on the left - facing right) and Mr. Mate (on the right - facing left). The camera focuses on these heroes. They both look at MariogD's raised hand (MariogD has a worried face).

58. Mr. Mate has an indifferent face), which Mr. Mate finishes bandaging and says (indifferently): "Done". They look into each other's eyes, MariogD lowers his hand, smiles and says (grateful): "Thanks!". Mr. Mate smiles gently, then looks at MariogD's hand, and then says (somewhat maliciously): "You won't be Robin Hood with this hand".

59. Mr. Mate smiles humorously (he's in a great mood for joking). MariogD looks at Mr. Mate and he close his eyelids halfway, but says nothing. Suddenly you hear Mejson's off-screen voice (indifferent): "Are you ready now?". The camera zooms out and also shows Mejson standing in the entrance. MariogD turns to Mejson and looks at him uncertainly.

60. MariogD is reluctant and says (reluctantly): "Can't we speak later? My hand hurts". Mejson's face is unchanged, and he says (indifferently): "Now, little brother". MariogD <sighs> (his body rises slightly up and down).

61. Then MariogD follows Mejson who turns and leaves the Dome. For a moment, Mr. Mate watches the heroes leave, then the camera zooms in on him. Mr. Mate turns to the front, looks around the tent and scratches his head. Suddenly his gaze lingers on Bill. Mr. Mate squints one's eyes, he slowly lowers his hand and stares at Bill for a moment.

62. After that he raises his eyebrows, then runs to Bill's bed and crouches down behind him (behind the bed). Next he grabs Bill's wrist and lifts him a little, staring at it intently. After a long moment, Mr. Mate's pupils (in the eyes) narrow (he is surprised) and says (surprised): "He's dead...". After a while, Mr. Mate makes a serious face, turns his head to the left and shouts (firmly): "Hey everyone! Bill's chasing unicorns now!". After a moment, blackout.


Light effect:

Normal (midday).


Dialogues:

Steve: "Rise and shine, my sleeping prince"
Steve: "Slept well?"
Steve: "Don't worry, we only lost because he cheated"
Mejson: "Can we ever make it back home?"
Steve: "Why are you asking that now?"
Mejson: "I'm not sure..."
Steve: "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"
Mejson: "Steve... you're not really here, are you?"
Steve: "But I can be whoever you want!"
Delsin: "It'll be okay, Mr. Mejson"
Mr. Mate: "Get a grip!"
Mr. Mate: "Don't forget! You are leader!"
MariogD: "You have my bow!"
Mejson: "At this point, I'd prefer Steve"
MariogD: "Asshole..."
Steve: "It could be much worse…"
Mejson: "Right... I've seen enough"
Mejson: <moan of pain>
Mejson: "Fuck! Everything hurts!"
Mejson: "I'm too old for this shit..."
Mejson: <with a groan>
Mr. Mate: "I never thought I would miss your grumpy voice!"
Mr. Mate: <croaking>
Mr. Mate: "Glad to see you back on your feet, old man!"
Mejson: "Thanks man, I appreciate it"
Mejson: "What did I miss?"
Mr. Mate: "You have to hear this..."
MariogD: "Are you serious?"
MariogD: "He has no idea what he's doing!"
Bott*: "Give us a moment"
Bott*: "Candy... bad guys..."
MariogD: "What's going on?!"
Candy: <strange long hiss>
MariogD: "Woah!"
MariogD: "Come at me, bro!"
Candy: <wild animal pain>
MariogD: "...the fuck?!"
Candy: <wild animal hiss pain>
MariogD: "What's the matter?"
MariogD: "Tired already?"
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: "Motherfucker!"
Bott*: "Enough! You got them!"
Bott*: "It's safe now..."
Bott*: "Ouch! We need a medic!"
MariogD: "You're the medic, jackass!"
Bott*: "Right... we're doing an amputation!"
MariogD: "Are you out of your fucking mind?!"
Bott*: "I've never done an amputation..."
MariogD: "What have you done to him?"
Mejson: "Exactly!"
Mejson: "What have you done with my kid?!"
Mejson: "'...tell everyone what happened to Candy!'"
Bott*: "I helped Candy unlock his potential by..."
Mejson: "...by brainwashing him?!"
Bott*: "You wanted to toughen him up, right?"
Bott*: "We're making great progress!"
Mejson: "That's enough!"
Mejson: "It ends now, do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sure..."
Mejson: "Do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: <sighs deeply>
Mejson: "I wanted to get through to him calmly..."
Mejson: "Why are you standing here? Treat the wounds"
Mejson: "I'm not done with you yet!"
Mejson: "What did I do to deserve this?"
Mejson: "Aghhh!"
Mejson: "Mate, you gotta stop doing that!"
Mejson: "One day I'll get a heart attack because of you guys!"
Mejson: "Go help MariogD"
Mr. Mate: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: "Very funny… go! Don't make me angry"
Mejson: "I have one more moron to talk to…"
Delsin: "I heard Mejson has just woken up!"
MariogD: "Good luck, my friend..."
Mr. Mate: "Like I said, we're in this shit together"
Delsin: "Mr. Mejson, nice to have you back!"
Mejson: "Well yes, I’m back. Indeed"
Mejson: "So you became a 'leader' in my absence?"
Delsin: "Well... your brother didn't want to, so… yeah"
Mejson: "I see… And how did you do? Any problems?"
Delsin: "Well, there were no attacks, and the team's holding up"
Mejson: "Bullshit! Bott* was drugging Candy right under your nose!"
Mejson: "And you did jack shit! Why?!"
Mejson: "You're surprised? True leaders know everything around them!"
Mejson: "Why did you ignore the warnings?!"
Delsin: "This killer... can't be trusted"
Mejson: "Really?! You’ve allowed your personal beliefs to obstruct your judgment?!"
Mejson: <takes a deep breath>
Mejson: "You disappointed me..."
Mejson: "I don't want to hear any excuses!"
Mr. Mate: "Done"
MariogD: "Thanks!"
Mr. Mate: "You won't be Robin Hood with this hand"
Mejson: "Are you ready now?"
MariogD: "Can't we speak later? My hand hurts"
Mejson: "Now, little brother"
MariogD: <sighs>
Mr. Mate: "He's dead..."
Mr. Mate: "Hey everyone! Bill's chasing unicorns now!"

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Comments

Woooo hooo! It's real honor to see this Scene 16 is finished finally! Remember, you are two scenes away from animating! I hope you're ready to get back to animating! ^^

Hmmm good :) Unfortunately, no :P Yet Reduce 2 - Pass of Time - Part II to create / animate. Ready? And do you have to prepare? :P

Thanks for comment!

“Thanks @ChordC for adding me to your epic songs as Inspiration!”:
I did the same with @MATRVG for calculated downfall and MM3 remix, because he inspired me to do them. I want to do the same with @Mejson for the Reduce songs, because he also inpired me to do them.

Anyway, here’s my dialogue proposal:

Steve: "Time to get up, my sleeping prince" ==> “Rise and shine, my sleeping prince”
Steve: "Did you sleep well?" ==> “Hope you had a sweet dream, buddy”
Steve: "Don't worry, we only lost because he was cheating" ==> “Don’t worry, we’ll get’em next time”
Mejson: "Can we really return to home?" ==> “Can we really return home?”

Steve: "Why are you asking that now?"
Mejson: "I'm not sure..."
Steve: "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"

Mejson: "Steve... you're not really here, are you?" ==> “Steve… you’re not real, aren’t you?”

Steve: "But I can be whoever you want!"
Delsin: "It'll be okay, Mr. Mejson"
Mr. Mate: "Get a grip!"
Mr. Mate: "You are our leader!"
MariogD: "You have my bow!"
Mejson: "At that point I prefer Steve"
MariogD: "Asshole..."

Steve: "It could be much worse…" ==> “I could’ve done worse”

Mejson: "Right... I've seen enough"
Mejson: <moan of pain>
Mejson: "Fuck! Everything hurts!"
Mejson: "I'm too old for this shit..."
Mejson: <with a groan>
Mr. Mate: "I never thought I would miss your grumpy voice!"
Mr. Mate: <croaking>

Mr. Mate: "I'm glad to see you back on your feet!" ==> “Glad to see you back on your feet, old man!”

Mejson: "Thanks man, I appreciate it"

Mejson: "What's going on?" ==> “What did I miss?”

Mr. Mate: "You have to hear this..."
MariogD: "Are you serious?"
MariogD: "He doesn't know what he's doing!"

Bott*: "Give us a moment"
Bott*: "Candy... bad guys..."

MariogD: "What's going on?!" ==> “What the hell?!”

Candy: <strange long hiss>
MariogD: "Woah!"

MariogD: "Go for it!" ==> “Yeah! Get’em!”

Candy: <wild animal pain>
MariogD: "...the fuck?!"
Candy: <wild animal hiss pain>
MariogD: "What's the matter?"
MariogD: "Tired already?"
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: "Motherfucker!"
Bott*: "That's enough! You got them!"
Bott*: "It's safe now..."
Bott*: "Ouch! We need a medic!"
MariogD: "You're a medic, you idiot!"
Bott*: "Right... we're doing an amputation!"

MariogD: "Are you fucking crazy?!" ==> “Are you out of your fucking mind?!”

Bott*: "I've never done an amputation..."
MariogD: "What have you done to him?"
Mejson: "Exactly!"
Mejson: "What have you done with my kid?!" ==> “What have you done to my son?!”
Mejson: "'...tell everyone what happened to Candy!'" ==> “Well?! Explain yourself!”

Bott*: "I helped Candy unlock his potential by..."
Mejson: "...by brainwashing him?!"
Bott*: "I was sure you'd thank me..."
Bott*: "We're making such a progress!"
Mejson: "That's enough!"
Mejson: "It ends now, do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sure..."
Mejson: "Do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: <sighs deeply>
Mejson: "I wanted to get through to him calmly..."
Mejson: "Why are you standing here? Treat the wounds"
Mejson: "I'm not done with you yet!"

Mejson: "What a torment I have with them..." ==> “What did I do to deserve this?!”

Mejson: "Aghhh!"
Mejson: "Geez... you need to stop doing this!"
Mejson: "Someday I will have a heart attack because of you guys!"
Mejson: "Go help MariogD"
Mr. Mate: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: "Very funny… go! Don't make me angry"
Mejson: "I have one more moron to talk to…"
Delsin: "I heard Mejson has just woken up!"
MariogD: "Good luck, my friend..."
Mr. Mate: "Like I said, we're in this shit together"

Delsin: "Mr. Mejson, nice to have you back!" ==> “Mr. Mejson, it is nice to have you back!”

Mejson: "Well yes, I’ve returned indeed"
Mejson: "So you became a 'leader' in my absence?"

Delsin: "Well... your brother didn't want to, so… yeah" ==> “Well… Your brother didn’t have the guts, so… yeah”
Mejson: "Hmm… and how was it, any problems?" ==> “I see… And how did you do? Any problems?”
Delsin: "I think it was fine. There was silence in the base" ==> “I think I did fine, there was only silence in the base”

Mejson: "Bullshit! Bott* was drugging Candy right under your nose!"
Mejson: "And you fucking did nothing! Why?!"
Mejson: "Are you surprised I know?! I know! True leader knows everything!"
Mejson: "Why did you ignore the warnings?!"
Delsin: "This killer... can't be trusted"
Mejson: "Really?! You’ve allowed your personal beliefs to obstruct your judgment?!"
Mejson: <takes a deep breath>
Mejson: "I'm disappointed in you..."
Mejson: "I don't want to hear any excuses!"
Mr. Mate: "Done"
MariogD: "Thanks!"
Mr. Mate: "You won't be Robin Hood with this hand"
Mejson: "Are you here?"
Mejson: "Come on brother, we need to talk"
MariogD: "Can't we speak later? My hand hurts"
Mejson: "Now, little brother"
MariogD: <sighs>
Mr. Mate: "He's dead...”

Mr. Mate: "Hey, folks!  Bill's gone!" ==> “Guys, Bill is no longer with us…”

Cool! Thanks! I appreciate it!

Cool ideas for dialogues!

Got no scene suggestions or additions here; everything looks pretty poignant. Since this chapter is so pivotal with so many important things happening though, I can imagine there might be loads to consider in the chapters detailing its fallout.

Now for dialogues:

Steve: "Time to get up, my sleeping prince" -> "Bad morning, sweet prince." (Hamlet reference - original line was "Goodnight, Sweet Prince". Also think it's good to limit repeat word use, as next line from Steve will repeat sleep.)

Steve: "Did you sleep well?" -> "Slept well?"

Steve: "Don't worry, we only lost because he was cheating" -> "Don't worry, we only lost 'cause he cheated."

Mejson: "Can we really return to home?" -> "Can we ever make it back home?"

Steve: "Why are you asking that now?"
Mejson: "I'm not sure..."
Steve: "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger"
Mejson: "Steve... you're not really here, are you?"

Steve: "But I can be whoever you want!" -> "Who else could be here? Maybe..."

Delsin: "It'll be okay, Mr. Mejson"
Mr. Mate: "Get a grip!"
Mr. Mate: "You are our leader!"
MariogD: "You have my bow!"

Mejson: "At that point I prefer Steve" -> "At this point, I'd prefer Steve."

MariogD: "Asshole..."
Steve: "It could be much worse…"
Mejson: "Right... I've seen enough"
Mejson: <moan of pain>
Mejson: "Fuck! Everything hurts!"
Mejson: "I'm too old for this shit..."
Mejson: <with a groan>

Mr. Mate: "I never thought I would miss your grumpy voice!" -> "Never would've thought I'd miss your grumpy voice!"

Mr. Mate: <croaking>
Mr. Mate: "I'm glad to see you back on your feet!"
Mejson: "Thanks man, I appreciate it"
Mejson: "What's going on?"

Mr. Mate: "You have to hear this..." -> "You're going to want to hear this."

MariogD: "Are you serious?"

MariogD: "He doesn't know what he's doing!" -> "He has no idea what he's doing!"

Bott*: "Give us a moment"

Bott*: "Candy... bad guys..." -> "Oh Candy... There's a baddie!"

MariogD: "What's going on?!"
Candy: <strange long hiss>
MariogD: "Woah!"

MariogD: "Go for it!" -> "Come on!" OR "Come at me!"

Candy: <wild animal pain>
MariogD: "...the fuck?!"
Candy: <wild animal hiss pain>
MariogD: "What's the matter?"
MariogD: "Tired already?"
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: <groan of pain>
MariogD: "Motherfucker!"

Bott*: "That's enough! You got them!" -> "Hold, Candy! You got 'em!"

Bott*: "It's safe now..." -> "Coast is clear."

Bott*: "Ouch! We need a medic!"

MariogD: "You're a medic, you idiot!" -> "You're the medic, jackass!"

Bott*: "Right... we're doing an amputation!" -> "Right... You'll need an amputation!"

MariogD: "Are you fucking crazy?!"

Bott*: "I've never done an amputation..." -> "I've never done one before..."

MariogD: "What have you done to him?"
Mejson: "Exactly!"
Mejson: "What have you done with my kid?!"
Mejson: "'...tell everyone what happened to Candy!'"
Bott*: "I helped Candy unlock his potential by..."
Mejson: "...by brainwashing him?!"

Bott*: "I was sure you'd thank me..." -> "You wanted to toughen him up, right?"

Bott*: "We're making such a progress!" -> "We're making great progress!"

Mejson: "That's enough!"
Mejson: "It ends now, do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sure..."
Mejson: "Do you understand?!"
Bott*: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: <sighs deeply>
Mejson: "I wanted to get through to him calmly..."

Mejson: "Why are you standing here? Treat the wounds" -> "Why are you standing here? Treat his wounds!"

Mejson: "I'm not done with you yet!"

Mejson: "What a torment I have with them..." -> "These guys are such a nightmare..."

Mejson: "Aghhh!"

Mejson: "Geez... you need to stop doing this!" -> "Jesus, you gotta stop doing that!"

Mejson: "Someday I will have a heart attack because of you guys!" -> "I'll get a heart attack from you all one day."

Mejson: "Go help MariogD"

Mr. Mate: "Sir, yes sir!"
Mejson: "Very funny… go! Don't make me angry"
Mejson: "I have one more moron to talk to…"
Delsin: "I heard Mejson has just woken up!"
MariogD: "Good luck, my friend..."
Mr. Mate: "Like I said, we're in this shit together"
Delsin: "Mr. Mejson, nice to have you back!"

Mejson: "Well yes, I’ve returned indeed" -> "Yes, I've returned."

Mejson: "So you became a 'leader' in my absence?"
Delsin: "Well... your brother didn't want to, so… yeah"

Mejson: "Hmm… and how was it, any problems?" -> "I see... And were there difficulties?"

Delsin: "I think it was fine. There was silence in the base" -> "Well, there were no attacks, and the team's holding up."

Mejson: "Bullshit! Bott* was drugging Candy right under your nose!"

Mejson: "And you fucking did nothing! Why?!" -> And you did jack shit! Why?!"

Mejson: "Are you surprised I know?! I know! True leader knows everything!" -> "You're surprised? True leaders know everything around them!"

Mejson: "Why did you ignore the warnings?!"
{Cut out this dialogue because space running out; no suggestions here}
Mr. Mate: "You won't be Robin Hood with this hand"

Mejson: "Are you here?" -> "Are you ready now?"
{Cut also this}
Mr. Mate: "Hey, folks! Bill's gone!" -> "Hey everyone! Bill's gone!"

Thanks for the dialogues! As always unearthly! Cool!

I'm glad you didn't feel offended by the Delsin situation (I hope so) :P

Yes, this season is not about pushing sharply forward, but rather about the relationships and emotions of the heroes.

All updated in this Poster (scene). I close this scene, documentation updated. Also we create high level planning for scene 17. I can tell - IT not be easy.