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Reduce 3 - Scene 17 (Planning) - Part I

Posted by Mejson - September 1st, 2022


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Welcome everyone!


First thing:

I would like to know how are you doing DUB? Especially since I haven't heard from some of you (recently). And I'm a bit worried about you :/ Are you sure you are all right - @Cyberdevil and @Plasmarift? I hope guys we soon get back info from you guys. In general, let me put it - thank you all for a great job!


Main thing:

Let's go to the merits. Here is before you - Scene 17 - Part I! Yes... it turned out that this scene should be divided into two parts (for Posters and documentation). What can you expect in this scene? Well, the title of this scene reveals a lot :P I am convinced that it will be a scene containing: a lot of action, spider corpses and emotions of our heroes. There will also be something for connoisseurs of humor :) Feel free to read! If anyone still thinks that the added Posters are spoilers, I will say - before the scenes see the light of day, you will all forget what the scenes contained XD. For the entire Reduce 3 he anticipates 5 years... I know it's a long time, but this season will be unique in every way!


Extra thing:

From exceptional situations, I am honored to inform you that our great companion - Bott* will be striming! The expected time period is: 01/09/2022 - 07/09/2022, i.e. starting today! Hours: 5 PM - 8 PM (MAX) CEST. For other locations it is - EST: 11 AM - 2 PM, WIB: 10 PM - 1 AM (next day). I'm convinced that everyone will find something for themselves! I cordially invite you! @SayMeBott please provide a link (to the strims) in the comments (under this Poster). Of course if you want.


What do you think about it, @Cyberdevil@Azure@ChordC@MariogD@SayMeBott@Colizza@XavierDalton@MATRVG?


Regards,

Mejson


Scene 17 - Spiders' revenge

Inscription (on black background):

Episode 17
Day 48
(~3 days later)
7:24 AM


Action:

1. The scene starts at a familiar location - Mejson and Candy are sitting at a campfire (the fire is burning and crackling). The heroes sit in silence. Candy is sitting on the right (sitting in silence, eating some roasted meat and staring at the ground). Mejson is sitting on the left (his hands are on his knees, he is bent over a little forward).

2. He squint one's eyes (he looks suspiciously at Candy - watching him). Candy stops eating for a moment and looks at Mejson curiously. Their eyes meet, Mejson makes an embarrassed face and looks down at the ground. Candy goes back to the activity that was interrupted and looks down at the ground as well. After a moment, Mejson looks at Candy seriously again.

3. After a while - unexpectedly Candy is <sneeze>, and Mejson shudders in shock / scared (he has a scared face for a moment) and reacts (shocked): "Fuck!". Candy looks at Mejson curiously. After a while, Mejson calms down and looks at the ground indifferently, then says to himself (indifferently): "Madhouse...".

4. Next, the camera moves to the left (it passes a "parked" spider, also directed to the left) and stops at a workbench and a pile of stones and sticks. Bott* is experimenting at the workbench (standing front to viewer) and MariogD is sitting on the stones (slightly above and to the right). He is watching at Bott* (Mejson ordered him) after the recent events.

5. There are a lot of different objects on the workshop table (wooden bowls and vials, various plant fragments - like on the alchemist's table). Bott* stands very focused behind this table. He carefully pours some white substance from the vial into the bowl (in front of him), then picks up another vial and a small stick. He stirs substance in the vial with this stick.

6. MariogD, who has been watching an arrow in his hand with pleasure and satisfaction (new Dry Poison Arrows), suddenly hides it in his quiver. Then he straightens up and turns his head towards Bott* (still with a bored look). Suddenly MariogD says to Bott* (bored): "What are you trying to achieve, exactly?". Bott* flinches a little (his eyes look shocked by the question for a moment).

7. Next he squint one's eyes, then turns his head to the right (to the side) and says (firmly and irritated): "Sshhh! I'm trying to focus!". Then he goes back to the interrupted activity with a tired expression on his face and says (dissatisfied): "And why are you standing here, exactly?". MariogD's face changes to malicious (smiles maliciously) and he <snort>.

8. Next he replies (maliciously): "You know perfectly why...". And then adds (emphatically): "You only have yourself to blame". Bott* rolls his eyes, then <sighs>. Then Bott* makes a serious face and says to himself (focused): "Focus... focus". Anyway, on the left side of the workshop, there is a mysterious box with an even more mysterious symbol.

9. Bott* poured out the pink contents of the (mixed) vial, then slowly stirred the contents of the bowl. Suddenly Bott* grabs (with both hands) this bowl with joy on his face and quickly lifts it above his head - as a result (violent agitation of the contents) a mist of this substance (color - 9938BC) appears above the bowl.

10. Bott* screams with crazy eyes (crazy): "Yeees! I finally made it!". MariogD shudders in surprise, straightens up and reacts (surprised): "Not again…". After a while he calms down and asks (interested): "What did you do this time?". Bott* lowers the bowl - in front of his face and looking at it happily (without looking away).

11. Next he says (crazy): "Forced pheromone obedience!". MariogD makes an embarrassed face and replies (perplexed): "Eee... I don't understand". Bott* replies (crazy): "It doesn't matter because I understand!". MariogD squint one's eyes (he became offended). Suddenly, Bott* shudders, becomes sad and says (sadly): "But who am I going to test it on?".

12. MariogD stops what he's doing, straightens up and looks at Bott* (turns his head and squint one's eyes). Bott* puts the bowl on the table and his face changes to a disappointed expression. Bott* says (disappointed): "Damn promise...". After a while, the camera goes right and stops at the plant pot (upper part - leaves). Delsin is standing on a leaf with a spear gun - he is patrolling / guarding the base.

13. He looks around for a moment, then turns and goes to the left (on the leaf) - he moves over the leaves. Suddenly, the camera moves upwards - up on the protruding leaves. On one of them is followed by a spider - it is creeping towards Delsin. This spider is half the size of an ant (or slightly larger). After a while, the camera moves to the base of the pot.

14. Mr. Mate (he is propped up against the flowerpot - front). His eyes are closed - he may be napping / resting and his arms are crossed. Suddenly you hear a spider's hiss, and a second later Delsin's reaction (anger): "Shiiit!". Mr. Mate opens his eyes and looks up suspiciously. Moments later, Delsin falls with the spider (has a spear (ammo) thrust into its body).

15. Mr. Mate jumps left (avoids collisions with falling ones). Delsin and the spider hit the ground, Delsin makes a <groan of pain>. He is pinned down by a spider, but he covers himself with his weapon (wrestles with the spider), has a furious face (shows his teeth). Initially, Mr. Mate looks at this situation indifferently (stands still).

16. Delsin's eye wanders towards Mr. Mate and says (pressed and tightly): "Help me, Mate!". Mr. Mate squint one's eyes and still didn't move. Delsin says again (pressed and tightly): "Mate?!". Mr. Mate makes a bored face, shrugs his shoulders and <sighs>. He then pulls out the knife, dashes to the spider's head, and quickly stabs the knife into the spider's head.

17. The spider lets out a hiss of pain and slumps slowly on Delsin. Mr. Mate, with an indifferent expression on his face, lifts the spider a little and helps Delsin out. Delsin slips out from under the spider, stands up and says (agitated): "What took you so long?". Mr. Mate investigates the spider curiously and ignores Delsin.

18. Suddenly an alarm sounds - a noise from the left side of the base. Both heroes quickly straighten / turn left. Their faces express surprise. The camera goes left and stops at the crates (just above, between the Dome and the Campfire). Mejson and Candy are standing by these boxes. Mejson on the right (turned left), Candy on the left (turned right).

19. Mejson is focused on the new hardware he has finished fitting. It is a small shoulder crossbow (attached to the forearm) and a small hip (attached to the hip) quiver for arrows (their tips are poisoned - dried spider poison). Candy looks at Mejson's activity curiously. Mejson says to himself (pleased): "It's always nice to put on some new gear".

20. Next Mejson looks at Candy and grows serious. Mejson says (firmly): "Candy, why are you just standing still?!". And he adds (firmly): "Hide somewhere. We're under attack!". Candy looks at Mejson's face with interest. The camera moves to the left and stops at the workbench. Bott* stands behind the workbench (facing the viewer) with a crazy expression on his face.

21. He is in a hurry to pour the mysterious substance into clay (small) jars (and corks it after that). As he does this, he says to himself (crazy): "Amazing! Such an occasion! It must be my birthday!". After a while you hear the off-screen MariogD (not too loud) scream (emphatic): "Where are you, dude?!".

22. Bott* squint one's eyes, turns his head to left and shouts (agitated): "Coming, my 'watchdog'!". Then the camera moves to the left and stops at the Barricade. One spider is lying on a barricade with an arrow (poisoned) in its head (dead). Another spider is lying in front of the Barricade also with an arrow (poisoned) in its body (dead).

23. MariogD stands at a certain (specific) distance with a taut bow with a poisoned arrow. To be clear, the heroes started using the dried-up version of poison (to avoid fooling around with dipping each arrow in poison). He squint one's eyes and waits with bated breath (his cage rises and falls a bit - MariogD has already warmed up).

24. Suddenly, one spider jumps over the Barricade. It lands close to MariogD, which surprises him. He collapses on his back, but manages to shoot the spider's body and scream (in surprise): "Ahh… Fuck you!". The spider approaches MariogD and when it is close to it, it slides to the ground (this happens quickly).

25. MariogD says to himself (reassuringly): "I'm glad this shit works...". Suddenly, two more spiders jump over the Barricade. MariogD makes a shocked face (for a moment), needs no more, gets up quickly and runs to the right. The camera focuses on the running MariogD (zoom in). After a while, the hero runs past the trap.

26. And after a while he turns around (while running) and slides to a position crouched on his knee. Then, breathing faster (as before), he draws the arrow, pulls the bow. He's sweat on face and squint one's eyes appear on his forehead as he waits for his opponent. The camera then shows a spider coming from the left as it runs and then its hind leg falls into a trap.

27. The spider emits a hiss of pain (it is immobilized). Next camera came back to the hero. MariogD is about to shoot, but suddenly he hears off-screen Bott* scream (crazy): "Leeroooy!". MariogD looks to the right, while Bott* runs up and jumps out of MariogD's back scream further (crazy): "Jenkinsss!". And stabs the spade into the spider's head from a jump.

28. In shock, MariogD watches Bott* (his face shocked) and says (shocked): "Whoooa! That's the spirit!". Bott* pulls out a spade and reacts (crazy): "Fuck yeah!". Bott* turns around and says to MariogD (crazy): "Let's smash the others!". MariogD gets up without a word and runs down and to the left (diagonally) - he disappears behind the left caravan of the screen.

29. The camera then zooms in on Bott* who smiles as he looks at 'Shevy' and says (crazy): "Forward, my love! Let's give the rest of these bugs a kiss too!". Then he runs left and up (diagonally). The camera follows him. Bott* runs to another captured spider and, with a crazy expression on his face, stabs the spade into the worm's head. The spider emits a painful hiss of pain ( falls to the ground).

30. After a while, the camera goes left and down (to the place where MariogD ran). The spider is dead (he has an arrow in his head). MariogD is standing in front of him, shakes his sore hand (the bandaged one) with a painful expression on his face and says to himself looking at that hand (painfully): "Damn contusion!".

31. After a while, the camera moves quickly to the left (also moving away) - a mass of spiders (4 specimens) is approaching. Then the camera quickly returns to the heroes (zoom in) - they stand together (in the middle, in front of the first spider killed). Bott* still with a crazy expression on his face and MariogD with horror in his eyes.

32. MariogD shouts (shocked): "Retreat! There are too many of them!". MariogD then turns and runs away. Bott* does the same after a while. The camera zooms in on both heroes and follows them. The camera then focuses on MariogD (zoom in), which runs (passes) near the stationary Spear Gun and turns around on the run.

33. Then slides (while still standing) straight to the gun. And when he's close, he grabs the trigger of the gun and yells (firmly): "Move over, Bott*!". The camera moves a little to the left. Bott* is still running on the line of fire with a crazy expression on his face. After a while, Bott* turns (to left) when still running and slides to the knee (slightly below, next to MariogD). Bott* yells (crazy): "Kill those motherfuckers!".

34. MariogD smirks maliciously and starts shooting. The hero moves (a little) with his weapon up and down (he aims) - we assume that he also aims to the sides, but it cannot be seen from this perspective. MariogD has a focused face, fires a missile, and after a moment, Bott* reacts (excited): "Bull's-eye!". MariogD make a smile for a moment.

35. Then he grabs the reloading lever of the weapon and pulls it with his injured hand (only the one he has free), but after a while with a painful expression on his face and <groans of pain> lets it go, shudders and grabs his hand (bandaged). Bott* turns his head towards him and reacts (intrigued): "Hurry up, man! This one is close!".

36. MariogD turns his head to him and replies (angrily): "Damn! It's your fault!". And he adds (angrily): "Forgot about this?!". Bott* shrugs and replies (discouraged): "You grumbly like your brother...". MariogD squint one's eyes for a moment. Then Bott* grabs the reloading lever with both hands and reloads with a serious - normal face. MariogD says to himself (intrigued): "I'm not that old…".

37. Bott* looks left after each shot without comment (his mood is spoiled). This weapon has 4 missiles and this is how many have been fired. When the last bullet is fired, the camera moves to the left together with the bullet. During the flight of the projectile, you can see 3 spider bodies (killed with this weapon). The last (4th bullet) hits the last (visible) spider.

38. This weapon has 4 missiles and this is how many have been fired. When the last bullet is fired, the camera moves to the left together with the bullet. During the flight of the projectile, you can see 3 spider bodies (killed with this weapon). The last (4th bullet) hits the last (visible) spider. After a while, the camera moves to the left (zoom off).

39. Another 2 spiders are coming from the left side (that spiders is shown by camera). The camera then returns to the heroes (zoom in). MariogD on the left (inverted to the right) and Bott* on the right (inverted to the left). MariogD has a worried face and says (agitated): "Shit! Now what?!". Bott* smiles, makes a crazy face and says: "They shall not pass!". And he leans back (when he yells it) and raises both his arms (with a shovel) and his head.

40. Then Bott* gives MariogD 2 clay jars (he kept 3 for himself). MariogD takes the jars and, looking at them, says (concerned): "Will it work?". Bott* reacts (confident): "Of course!". Then MariogD turns to the left (looks focused into the distance). Bott* has a normal face for a moment and says to himself in a quieter manner (unsure) : "I think so...".

41. MariogD turns his head (raises one eyebrow and lowers the other - he didn't hear) and says (curious): "What are you saying?". Bott* says (calmly): "I've got something for you" and pulls out his weapon - bone's knife (not too big and also not too small, but certainly one-handed). MariogD turns to Bott*, takes the gift and says (calmly): "Thanks".

42. Both heroes turn left. MariogD squint one's eyes, Bott* makes a crazy face, yells (crazy): "Chaaarge!" and he starts running with the shovel ('Shevy') raised. The camera focuses on Bott* (zoom in) and go with him. A spider approaches from the left and Bott* slides (he was running) as he leans back and raises his hand with the earthen jar (he takes a swing).

43. After a while, he throws the jar at the spider, which breaks audibly on the spider's head. A strange (medium-sized) mist rises on the spider (especially the head), and the spider itself freezes - like under a spell. Bott* yells (crazy): "Incredible! Just what the doctor ordered!". And then, wasting no time, he runs to the spider, raises his shovel and then stabs the spider in the head with a maddened smile.

44. Bott* turns his head because in the deeper background (meanwhile) MariogD does the same with another spider (breaking a jar and killing it with a bone's knife) that was heading towards MariogD. He makes a satisfied face, turns to Bott* and shouts (pleased): "Bott*, you are a genius!".

45. Bott* props himself up with a shovel like 'king of the world' and shouts (pleased): "I know that, bitch!". MariogD squint one's eyes for a moment. After a while, the camera moves slightly to the left (also zoom out). Suddenly a larger spider lands on the ground (jumped from above) - maybe not as big as in the scene - 'Sharp-shooters', but as big as the one that killed Diablo. The spider moves towards the heroes.

46. The camera goes right (also zoom in) to MariogD. He is excited (He caught the 'extermination' bug), looks towards the spider and shouts (excitedly): "This one's mine!". MariogD starts running and the camera moves left with him (he is very confident). When he is closer, the camera zooms out. MariogD slides while taking a swing.

47. He then tosses the jar that breaks on the creature's head. The spider stops, MariogD also stops for a moment (he's smug). During this time, Bott* catches up with his friend (he runs from behind the right edge of the screen). The spider moves mandibles (or some other body part). Bott* stops after MariogD - he has a serious face and shouts (anxiously): "Wait!".

48. MariogD ignores him and sets off on the spider (the camera zooms in on the hero and the spider). When he's close, suddenly the spider jumps to MariogD and presses him to the ground. The hero is surprised (he had only time to cover himself with a weapon). MariogD makes a <moan of pain> (when hitting the ground).

49. And after a while curses (surprised and overwhelmed): "Ugh! Fuuuck!". MariogD covers herself with a knife (from spider's fangs). After some time - two jars fly to the left, hit the spider in the head and the spider freezes. Then (after a while) Bott* runs (to the spider) and kills the spider - stabbing it several times furiously in the head.

50. The spider slides slowly to the ground. MariogD is sweaty (on his face) and is breathing with his mouth open. After a while, Bott* helps MariogD get out from under the spider's body. MariogD gets up and stands slightly bent - he is still in shock. Bott* scratches his head and says to himself, more intrigued than worried (intrigued): "Fascinating... The larger the beast, the larger the necessary dose...".

51. MariogD straightens up, looks at Bott* - he raises an eyebrow, a bit disgusted with his friend's reaction. Suddenly, scared MariogD shudders (his eyes narrow for a moment) and reacts intensely - lifting and looking at his hand on which there is a scratch (agitated): "Damn! That bastard scratched me!".

52. MariogD after some time regains his balance (calming himself down) and says (firmly but positively): "Right! There’s an antidote!". MariogD takes out a primitive syringe (made of available raw materials - like wood). MariogD then looks at the syringe, squint one's eyes, then at Bott* and asks (concerned): "Bott*, are you sure it's safe?".

53. Bott* reacts (crazy): "Ha ha, I have no idea...". MariogD raises his eyebrows - surprised for a moment, then his expression changes to tired and says (tired): "I don’t know what I expected…". MariogD stabs the syringe in his hand (near the scratch) with <hiss of pain>. Bott* watches this with intriguingly in his eyes.

<TO BE CONTINUED>


Light effect:

Yellow (morning).


Dialogues:

Candy:  <sneeze>
Mejson: "Fuck!"
Mejson: "Madhouse..."
MariogD: "What are you trying to achieve, exactly?"
Bott*: "Sshhh! I'm trying to focus!"
Bott*: "And why are you standing here, exactly?"
MariogD: <snort>
MariogD: "You know perfectly why..."
MariogD: "You only have yourself to blame"
Bott*: <sighs>
Bott*: "Focus... focus"
Bott*: "Yeees! I finally made it!"
MariogD: "Not again…"
MariogD: "What did you do this time?"
Bott*: "Forced pheromone obedience!"
MariogD: "Eee... I don't understand"
Bott*: "It doesn't matter because I understand!"
Bott*: "But who am I going to test it on?"
Bott*: "Damn promise..."
Delsin: "Shiiit!"
Delsin: <groan of pain>
Delsin: "Help me, Mate!"
Delsin: "Mate?!"
Mr. Mate: <sighs>
Delsin: "What took you so long?"
Mejson: "It's always nice to put on some new gear"
Mejson: "Candy, why are you just standing still?!"
Mejson: "Hide somewhere. We're under attack!"
Bott*: "Amazing! Such an occasion! It must be my birthday!"
MariogD: "Where are you, dude?!"
Bott*: "Coming, my 'watchdog'!"
MariogD: "Ahh… Fuck you!"
MariogD: "I'm glad this shit works..."
Bott*: "Leeroooy!"
Bott*: "Jenkinsss!"
MariogD: "Whoooa! That's the spirit!"
Bott*: "Fuck yeah!"
Bott*: "Let's smash the others!"
Bott*: "Forward, my love! Let's give the rest of these bugs a kiss too!"
MariogD: "Damn contusion!"
MariogD: "Retreat! There are too many of them!"
MariogD: "Move over, Bott*!"
Bott*: "Kill those motherfuckers!"
Bott*: "Bull's-eye!"
MariogD: <groans of pain>
Bott*: "Hurry up, man! This one is close!"
MariogD: "Damn! It's your fault!"
MariogD: "Forgot about this?!"
Bott*: "You grumbly like your brother..."
MariogD: "I'm not that old…"
MariogD: "Shit! Now what?!"
Bott*: "They shall not pass!"
MariogD: "Will it work?"
Bott*: "Of course!"
Bott*: "I think so..."
MariogD: "What are you saying?"
Bott*: "I've got something for you"
MariogD: "Thanks"
Bott*: "Chaaarge!"
Bott*: "Incredible! Just what the doctor ordered!"
MariogD: "Bott*, you are a genius!"
Bott*: "I know that, bitch!"
MariogD: "This one's mine!"
Bott*: "Wait!"
MariogD: <moan of pain>
MariogD:  "Ugh! Fuuuck!"
Bott*: "Fascinating... The larger the beast, the larger the necessary dose..."
MariogD:  "Damn! That bastard scratched me!"
MariogD:  "Right! There’s an antidote!"
MariogD:  "Bott*, are you sure it's safe?"
Bott*: "Ha ha, I have no idea..."
MariogD:  "I don’t know what I expected…"
MariogD:  <hiss of pain>

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Woah, I see a lot of Bott* lines here ^^'

In reference to streams - as @Mejson wrote, its rare regular event. Period is not a risk, but I would like the broadcast hours to be kept ^^'
If you are intrested, check my NG profile (there you find a connector to my Twitch)

Interesting action sequence, here’s some dialogue proposal:

Candy: <sneeze>
Mejson: "Fuck!"
Mejson: "Madhouse..."

MariogD: "What are you exactly trying to achieve?" ==> “What are you trying to achieve, exactly?”
Bott*: "I'm trying to focus!" ==> “Sshhh! I’m trying to focus!”
Bott*: "Why are you standing here exactly?" ==> “And why are you standing here, exactly?”

MariogD: <snort>

MariogD: "You know perfectly..." ==> “You know why I’m here alright”
MariogD: "You can blame only yourself" ==> “You only have yourself to blame”

Bott*: <sighs>
Bott*: "Focus... focus"

Bott*: "Yeees! I finally made it!" ==> “Yeees! Bott* has done it again!”
MariogD: "Hmm?" ==> “Not again…”
MariogD: "What have you made up, again?" ==> “What did you do this time?”

Bott*: "Forced pheromone obedience!"
MariogD: "Eee... I don't understand"
Bott*: "It doesn't matter because I understand!"
Bott*: "But who am I going to test it on?"

Bott*: "Damn promise..." ==> “I hate promises…”

Delsin: "Shiiit!"
Delsin: <groan of pain>
Delsin: "Help me, Mate!"
Delsin: "Mate?!"
Mr. Mate: <sighs>
Delsin: "What took you so long?"

Mejson: "It's good that we have this new gear" ==> “This can be useful”
Mejson: "What are just standing here?" ==> “Candy, why are you just standing there?”

Mejson: "Hide somewhere. We're under attack!"
Bott*: "Amazing! Such an occasion! It must be my birthday!"
MariogD: "Where are you, dude?!"

Bott*: "Wait! I'm coming, my 'watchdog'!" ==> “I’m going to safe you my princess!

MariogD: "Ahh… Fuck you!"
MariogD: "I'm glad this shit works..."
Bott*: "Leeroooy!"
Bott*: "Jenkinsss!"
MariogD: "Whoooa! That's the spirit!"
Bott*: "Fuck yeah!"
Bott*: "Let's smash the others!"
Bott*: "Come on, my love! Kiss the next bugs!"

MariogD: "Damn contusion!" ==> “Damn crustaceans!”

MariogD: "Retreat! There are too many of them!"
MariogD: "Move over, Bott*!"
Bott*: "Kill those motherfuckers!"
Bott*: "Bull's-eye!"
MariogD: <groans of pain>
Bott*: "Hurry up, man! This one is close!"

MariogD: "Damn! It's your fault!" ==> “Damn! This is your fault!”
MariogD: "Already forgot?!" ==> “Forgot about this?!”

Bott*: "You grumbly like your brother..."
MariogD: "I'm not that old…"

MariogD: "Now what?!" ==> “Shit! Now what?!”

Bott*: "They shall not pass!"
MariogD: "Will it work?"
Bott*: "Of course!"
Bott*: "I think so..."
MariogD: "What are you saying?"
Bott*: "I've got something for you"
MariogD: "Thanks"
Bott*: "Chaaarge!"

Bott*: "Nice! It's working!" ==> “Incredible! Just what the doctor ordered!”

MariogD: "Bott*, you are a genius!"

Bott*: "I know that, bitch!" ==> “Bow down to me mortal!
MariogD: "This one is mine!" ==> “This one’s mine!”

Bott*: "Wait!" ==> “Lookout!”

MariogD: <moan of pain>
MariogD: "Ugh! Fuuuck!"
Bott*: "Interesting... larger specimens need a larger dose..."

MariogD: "Damn! This bastard scratched me!" ==> “Damn! That bastard bit me!”

MariogD: "Right! There's an antitoxin!" ==> “Right! There’s an antidote!”

MariogD: "Bott*, are you sure it's safe?"
Bott*: "Ha ha, I have no idea..."

MariogD: "I don’t know what I expected…" ==> “What did I expect…”

MariogD: <hiss of pain>

4-5. - Before Bott* gets ticked with MariogD watching him in 7., I think a little prelude to his retort could help set the mood. The wording here indicates he isn't that much bothered (yet), but perhaps he could look over his shoulder towards MariogD that he is indeed distracted.

Also, retraoctively after reading 23., good to see that the manuscript explains what's happening with the dry arrows, but if MariogD is going to check out one of his arrows during these segments anyway, could we make it visually clear that is the case? The tips showing a different color, MariogD shoves a jar labeled "dry toxin" aside, or he can be seen rubbing the arrowhead with a rag coated in it. That last of this can also be done with his wounded hand and the digging-rub motion could cause strain, further referencing his injury last scene.

11-12. - Does Bott* say "But who am I going to test it on?" loud enough for MariogD to hear? I don't see a reaction from him. Maybe he squints his eyes and points at them before pointing at Bott*, silently reiterating that he's being watched with his little experiments. Bott* understands, and proceeds to say (as MariogD steps away for a moment) "Damn promise..."

That's it for suggestions. Now onto dialogues (on that note, since there's so few and I don't have changes for them, I'll go ahead and record them along with the revision for S16):

Candy: <sneeze>
Mejson: "Fuck!"
Mejson: "Madhouse..."

MariogD: "What are you exactly trying to achieve?" -> "What exactly are you trying to achieve?"

Bott*: "I'm trying to focus!" -> "Shush! Let me focus!"

Bott*: "Why are you standing here exactly?" -> "Why exactly are you standing there, anyway?"

MariogD: <snort>

MariogD: "You know perfectly..." -> "You know perfectly why..."

MariogD: "You can blame only yourself" -> "You have only yourself to blame."

Bott*: <sighs>
Bott*: "Focus... focus"

Bott*: "Yeees! I finally made it!" -> "Yeees! It's done, it's done!"

MariogD: "Hmm?"

MariogD: "What have you made up, again?" -> "What's done?"

Bott*: "Forced pheromone obedience!"
MariogD: "Eee... I don't understand"
Bott*: "It doesn't matter because I understand!"
Bott*: "But who am I going to test it on?"
Bott*: "Damn promise..."
Delsin: "Shiiit!"
Delsin: <groan of pain>
Delsin: "Help me, Mate!"
Delsin: "Mate?!"
Mr. Mate: <sighs>
Delsin: "What took you so long?"

Mejson: "It's good that we have this new gear" -> "It's always nice to put on some new gear."

Mejson: "What are just standing here?" -> "Candy, why are you just standing still?!"

Mejson: "Hide somewhere. We're under attack!"

Bott*: "Amazing! Such an occasion! It must be my birthday!" -> "Brilliant! A golden opportunity! Must be an early birthday present!"

MariogD: "Where are you, dude?!"

Bott*: "Wait! I'm coming, my 'watchdog'!" -> "Coming, my sweet prince!"

MariogD: "Ahh… Fuck you!"
MariogD: "I'm glad this shit works..."
Bott*: "Leeroooy!"
Bott*: "Jenkinsss!"
MariogD: "Whoooa! That's the spirit!"
Bott*: "Fuck yeah!"
Bott*: "Let's smash the others!"

Bott*: "Come on, my love! Kiss the next bugs!" -> "Forward, my love! Let's give the rest of these bugs a kiss too!"

MariogD: "Damn contusion!"
MariogD: "Retreat! There are too many of them!"
MariogD: "Move over, Bott*!"
Bott*: "Kill those motherfuckers!"
Bott*: "Bull's-eye!" -> "Bullseye!"
MariogD: <groans of pain>
Bott*: "Hurry up, man! This one is close!"

MariogD: "Damn! It's your fault!" -> "It's your fault it's close!"

MariogD: "Already forgot?!" -> "Remember this?"

Bott*: "You grumbly like your brother..." -> "You grumble like your old man of a brother..."

MariogD: "I'm not that old…"
MariogD: "Now what?!"
Bott*: "They shall not pass!"
MariogD: "Will it work?"
Bott*: "Of course!"
Bott*: "I think so..."
MariogD: "What are you saying?"
Bott*: "I've got something for you"
MariogD: "Thanks"
Bott*: "Chaaarge!"
Bott*: "Nice! It's working!"
MariogD: "Bott*, you are a genius!"

Bott*: "I know that, bitch!" -> "Tell me something I don't know!"

MariogD: "This one is mine!"

Bott*: "Wait!" -> "Watch yourself!"

MariogD: <moan of pain>
MariogD: "Ugh! Fuuuck!"

Bott*: "Interesting... larger specimens need a larger dose..." -> "Fascinating... The larger the beast, the larger the necessary dose..."

MariogD: "Damn! This bastard scratched me!" -> "Damint! I got bit!"

MariogD: "Right! There's an antitoxin!" -> "Oh yeah! We have an antidote!"

MariogD: "Bott*, are you sure it's safe?"
Bott*: "Ha ha, I have no idea..."

MariogD: "I don’t know what I expected…" -> "Why am I not surprised...?"

MariogD: <hiss of pain>

"4-5. - Before Bott* gets ticked with MariogD watching him in 7., I think a little prelude to his retort could help set the mood. The wording here indicates he isn't that much bothered (yet), but perhaps he could look over his shoulder towards MariogD that he is indeed distracted."

- We have decided with MariogD that at this point Bott * is focused and ignores MariogD, but thank you for the idea.

"Also, retraoctively after reading 23., good to see that the manuscript explains what's happening with the dry arrows, but if MariogD is going to check out one of his arrows during these segments anyway, could we make it visually clear that is the case? The tips showing a different color, MariogD shoves a jar labeled "dry toxin" aside, or he can be seen rubbing the arrowhead with a rag coated in it. That last of this can also be done with his wounded hand and the digging-rub motion could cause strain, further referencing his injury last scene."

- OK, yes, MariogD will be pleased to see the new arrow - Dry Poison Arrows. I do not envisage a new jar.

"11-12. - Does Bott* say "But who am I going to test it on?" loud enough for MariogD to hear? I don't see a reaction from him. Maybe he squints his eyes and points at them before pointing at Bott*, silently reiterating that he's being watched with his little experiments. Bott* understands, and proceeds to say (as MariogD steps away for a moment) "Damn promise...""

- OK, MariogD's reaction, as Bott* says: "But who am I going to test it on?". MariogD stops what he is doing, straightens up and looks at Bott* (turns his head and squint one's eyes).

Thanks for the suggestions, great as always! Thank you for your help! We also liked the dialogues very much.

@MariogD requested to be able to see the eulogy for Bill in the next scene, so here's a copy posted below:
"Tragedy has dogged every step of our adventure for survival. It has sicced terrible creatures upon us... Brought out the creatures inside ourselves. Put us at odds on a fundamental level, forcing us to create dividing lines. Taken our lives, tortured the rest. And it only seems to be the beginning... But we owe it to Bill. We owe it to all who have fallen. We must weather this storm and slice off the head of the snake. We conquered this latest mountain - we're ready to annihilate the next."

A very good text, but I think we will want to expand it - MariogD suggested you too literally with "1 min". I meant a rather longer monologue - after this introduction Delsin talks about all the deaths and heroes who have passed away (one by one) - we will be showing these heroes (when Delsin talks about them). Of course, thank you very much for this monologue - a great start!

@Mejson

I'm getting a clearer picture. So, after Delsin says "We owe it to all who have fallen", he then lists out "Jimmy, Jason, Conrad, God-DL (He'll be a fun name to say)" and so on, with translucent images of them floating on the screen?

Delsin will say something important about a given (dead) character when shown in the form of photos - memories. And so about the next one.

THIS PROJECT IS SO COOL